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Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientists people are not changing their life style Why so What should be done to encourage the people in order to save environment v.2

Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientists people are not changing their life style Why so What should be done to encourage the people in order to save environment v. 2
It is true that nowadays people are unaware of their actions creating a negative impact on the environment. Although, I believe that individuals do not have enough knowledge about recycling and how to take care of our planet. In fact, governments could introduce laws and educational programs to teach people the importance of recycling on a daily basis. In my opinion, lack of knowledge can affect how people take care of our planet. Firstly, educational programs could be introduced at schools to teach students how to recycle, and also what could be done to minimize pollution in our planet. For example, teaching children about global warming is a way to grow them up with the awareness of the problems and the solutions for it. In addition, homework regarding environmental issues could be given to set an example for parents to practice with their children at home. Secondly, human beings tend to do what is easier for them not changing poor habits. For instance, instead of cooperating people normally throw tons of garbage on the streets and do not recycle at home. On the other hand, governments could implement rules and regulations together with recycling training in every neighborhood. In the first place, once rules are introduced the responsible officer would check and monitor if people are recycling correctly as it was taught in the training, in case rules are not being followed fines would be applied to the individuals that are not respecting the law. In fact, governments should do a public service announcement to influence people’s habits. Perhaps, if we do not recycle paper then every time we need more paper trees get chopped down and this process not only depletes our resources but it also destroys the natural habitats. Besides, a plastic bottle can take at least 450 years to decompose. This is to say, if people learn the importance of converting waste into reusable material, homeowners could start to segregate their trash at home, and also stop throwing garbage on the streets. As a result, these actions could lead to a clean, waste- free environment for everyone. In conclusion, while people do not change poor habits due to convenience and lack of knowledge about global warming. Rules, regulations, campaigns, and training can be introduced in the neighborhoods. In the long run, the population can learn and understand the importance of recycling and how to take better care of our planet.
It is true that nowadays
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people
are unaware of their actions creating a
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negative
impact on the environment. Although, I believe that individuals do not have
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enough
knowledge about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
and how to take care of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
planet
. In fact,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
could introduce laws and educational programs to teach
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
the importance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
on a daily basis.

In my opinion, lack of knowledge can affect how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
take care of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
planet
.
Firstly
, educational programs could
be introduced
at schools to teach students how to recycle, and
also
what could
be done
to minimize pollution in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
planet
.
For example
, teaching children about global warming is a way to grow them up with the awareness of the problems and the solutions for it.
In addition
, homework regarding environmental issues could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to set an example for parents to practice with their children at home.
Secondly
, human beings tend to do what is easier for them not changing poor habits.
For instance
,
instead
of cooperating
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people
normally
throw tons of garbage on the streets and do not recycle at home.

On the other hand
,
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governments
could implement
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rules
and regulations together with
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recycling
training in every neighborhood. In the
first
place, once
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rules
are introduced
the responsible officer would
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check
and monitor if
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people
are
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recycling
correctly
as it
was taught
in the training, in case
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rules
are not
being followed
fines would
be applied
to the individuals that are not respecting the law. In fact,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should do a public service announcement to influence
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people’s
habits. Perhaps, if we do not recycle paper then every time we need more paper trees
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get
chopped down and this process not
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only
depletes our resources
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but
it
also
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destroys
the natural habitats.
Besides
, a plastic bottle can take at least 450 years to decompose. This is to say, if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
learn the importance of converting waste into reusable material, homeowners could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to segregate their trash at home, and
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
throwing garbage on the streets.
As a result
, these actions could lead to a clean, waste- free environment for everyone.

In conclusion
, while
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people
do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
poor habits due to convenience and lack of knowledge about global warming.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Rules
, regulations, campaigns, and training can
be introduced
in the neighborhoods. In the long run, the population can learn and understand the importance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
and how to take better care of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
planet
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientists people are not changing their life style Why so What should be done to encourage the people in order to save environment v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
403 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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