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Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientist, people are not changing their life style. Why is this the case? What could be done to encourage the people to save the environment? v.1

Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientist, people are not changing their life style. Why is this the case? What could be done to encourage the people to save the environment? v. 1
In today’s competitive world, the awareness regarding the surroundings has been modified drastically. Although, the researchers are instructing the public to make changes in their living style, no one has initiated this as they like to enjoy comfortable life and glamorous gadgets. The essay discusses what are reasons for not alternation, while what are steps must take to preserve the air are explained in the further paragraph. To begin with, the foremost cause is that the world has consisted of a number of different types of equipment which provides them facility and emits the gases that makes an environment polluted. This will be intensified by the growth of the population in the global. For example, in the recent times each person is using their own vehicle for their transportation, this will increase the problem of traffic even more make the atmosphere more polluted. Moreover, Most of the people are buying new things as they can afford new things, although no one tries to repair older equipment which generates more garbage. Therefore, this also plays a role to a detrimental effect on the atmosphere. On the other hand, there are certain precaution must be taken by the authority to savage the beauty of the atmosphere. The one way is that the regime must start the transportation service which having the larger capacity and increase the frequency of availability, so people use this service and helps to reduce traffic and air pollution in a particular citified. Consequentially, the other way is that the authority can impose the straighten rule, take fine from those who fail to follow it and publish the advertisement which explain the importance of the clean air; by suggesting the way to save it. For instance, Research conducted shows that tree plays a crucial role to manage the temperature and give the fresh air. Hence, organize such programs which plant a tree in the Megapolis. In conclusion, to manage the natural resources is the responsibility of the individual also the authority. This would be only possible by reducing pollution in the air, which generated by vehicles and instruments and start to plant a tree.
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been modified
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make
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changes
in their living style, no one has initiated this as they like to enjoy comfortable life and glamorous gadgets. The essay discusses what are reasons for not alternation, while what are steps
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must
take to preserve the
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are
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in the
further
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with, the foremost cause is that the world has consisted of a number of
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different
types of equipment which provides them facility and emits the gases that
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makes
an environment polluted. This will
be intensified
by the growth of the population in the global.
For example
, in the recent times each person is using their
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own
vehicle for their transportation, this will increase the problem of traffic even more
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make
the atmosphere more polluted.
Moreover
, Most of the
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people
are buying new things as they can afford new things, although no one tries to repair older equipment which generates more garbage.
Therefore
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also
plays a role to a detrimental effect on the atmosphere.

On the other hand
, there are certain precaution
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must
be taken
by the authority to savage the beauty of the atmosphere. The one way is that the regime
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must
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the transportation service which having the larger capacity and increase the frequency of availability,
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people
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this service and
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to
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traffic and
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air
pollution in a particular citified.
Consequentially
, the other way is that the authority can impose
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rule
, take fine from those who fail to follow it and publish the advertisement which
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explain
the importance of the clean
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air
; by suggesting the way to save it.
For instance
, Research conducted
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shows
that tree plays a crucial role to manage the temperature and give the fresh
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
.
Hence
, organize such programs which plant a tree in the Megapolis.

In conclusion
, to manage the natural resources is the responsibility of the individual
also
the authority. This would be
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only
possible by reducing pollution in the
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air
, which generated by vehicles and instruments and
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start
to plant a tree.
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IELTS essay Despite the environmental concerns raised by scientist, people are not changing their life style. Why is this the case? What could be done to encourage the people to save the environment? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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