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describe your dream job and explain why it is your dream job v.1

describe your dream job and explain why it is your dream job v. 1
Today I am going to talk about my dream job in the future. I have a plan to tell you what the job is, the sort of experience I might need to do it, and why I love it. My dream job would be to be a travel writer! For starter, travel writers are often self-employed. They trip the world to interesting places and then write magazine, newspaper and internet articles about their journey. Having said that, possibly qualifications that provide a good basic level of English language advantageous, and maybe even creative writing or journalism courses might help you to build confidence and reinforce a writing style. In the next place, to do this kind of work I have to be willing to go to lots of new places. You also need to be able to write fluently and in different styles for different publications. Tour writers must be very flexible, as you might need to go to challenging or uncomfortable places and to ride at short notice. Finally, the reason I would like to make this task so much is that I get passion to new places. That was a wonderful experience for me. I would so enjoy telling other people what it was like and encouraging them to go on an adventure of their own. I also like communicating ideas in writing, it would be wonderful to make a living out of the two things I enjoy most – trek and writing! All things considers, there are very few opportunities to make a living as a travel writer, so I think it might have to stay as my imagination career, rather than my actual job! Even so, I think it is important to have a dream, because otherwise how can you ever have a dream come true!
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would be to be a travel writer!

For starter, travel writers are
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often
self-employed. They trip the world to interesting
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places
and then write magazine, newspaper and internet articles about their journey. Having said that,
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qualifications that provide a
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basic level of English language advantageous, and maybe even creative writing or journalism courses
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help
you to build confidence and reinforce a writing style.

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, to do this kind of work I
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fluently
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different
styles for
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publications. Tour writers
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flexible, as you
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and to ride at short notice.

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. That was a wonderful experience for me. I would
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in writing, it would be wonderful to
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a living out of the two things I enjoy most
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trek and writing!

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IELTS essay describe your dream job and explain why it is your dream job v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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