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Describe a dream that you have had when you had it what it was about what you usually dream of when you sleep v.1

Describe a dream that you have had when you had it what it was about what you usually dream of when you sleep v. 1
Nowadays, watching T. V is becoming increasingly popular. While some people think that television can be used as Educational tool, others say that it is an ineffective way. This essay will discuss why television is a useful, knowledgeable gadget, and why others think it is not an effective method. Furthermore, it will elaborate my opinion, which is using the television is beneficial in Education. As it is obvious, small screen is a way of knowledge. Everyone can know more about other Culture. As well as, watching the wildlife programs teaches people alot about the fauna. Not only adults learn from screen, but also children, because they can watch mathematical cartoon which gives them plenty of information. For instance, the last Harvard university research has concluded that digital screen is the way of literacy. Using television, however, is not a good tool for Education. It is a waste of time and getting incorrect knowledge. Although watch T. V can be used as an Educational method, it can lead to losing the time, as people spend most of their day in front of it. Moreover, watching the wrong program gives people misinformation. In fact, if people over use T. V, it will be useless. Therefore, overusing the television is not an effective way for Education. In conclusion, there is no denying how important role T. V plays. Even though some people think that it can be used for getting information, others believe that it is ineffective. While adults and children can use it for knowing another culture and the wildlife, they might get incorrect knowledge. From my point of view, after throughout analysis on this subject, it is predicted that, using of the television is a good way for getting information and knowledge.
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television
can be
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used
as Educational tool, others say that it is an ineffective way. This essay will discuss why
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television
is a useful, knowledgeable gadget, and why others
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think
it is not an effective method.
Furthermore
, it will elaborate my opinion, which is using the
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television
is beneficial in Education.

As it is obvious,
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small
screen is a way of
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knowledge
. Everyone can know more about
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other
Culture.
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as, watching the wildlife programs teaches
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people
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alot
about the fauna. Not
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only
adults learn from screen,
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but
also
children,
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because
they can
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watch
mathematical cartoon which gives them
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plenty
of information.
For instance
, the last
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Harvard university
research has concluded that digital screen is the way of literacy.

Using
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television
,
however
, is not a
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good
tool for Education. It is a waste of time and getting incorrect
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knowledge
. Although
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watch
T. V can be
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used
as an Educational method, it can lead to losing the time, as
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people
spend most of their day in front of it.
Moreover
, watching the
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wrong
program gives
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people
misinformation. In fact, if
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people
over
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use
T. V, it will be useless.
Therefore
, overusing the
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television
is not an effective way for Education.

In conclusion
, there is no denying how
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important
role T. V plays.
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some
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people
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think
that it can be
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used
for getting information, others believe that it is ineffective. While adults and children can
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use
it for knowing another culture and the wildlife, they might
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get
incorrect
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knowledge
. From my point of view, after throughout analysis on this subject, it
is predicted
that, using of the
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television
is a
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good
way for getting information and
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knowledge
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe a dream that you have had when you had it what it was about what you usually dream of when you sleep v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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