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Describe a popular person who lives in your neighborhoodYou should say: - who she/he is- when you first met him/her- how you would describe his/her character- and say what the reason of his/her popularity is. v.1

Describe a popular person who lives in your neighborhoodYou should say: - who she/he is- when you first met him/her- how you would describe his/her character- and say what the reason of his/her popularity is. v. 1
In this contemporary era, there are myriad of environmental problems emerge. Society is polarized into two groups. Some people deem that the most predominant trouble is extinction of some flora and fauna. Whereas, some individuals believe that other problem like pollution is more pivotal than plants and creatures. Hence, I will discuss both perspectives and give your opinion in my forthcoming paragraphs. First time Paramount reason of the loss of plants and animals is that they are giving some food products as well as other resources. To elaborate it, plethora of plants are useful for making some crucial drugs similarly, Milk products and other things are provided us by animals. In addition to this, some people hunt innumerable innocent creatures for their own benefit so if they do not stop hunting, individuals cannot get some indispensable products. An example to illustrate this point is that a survey conducted by government of India in 2014 showed that there were only 2412 tigers left out of 5000 because of hunting by humans. These are some causes why plants and animals are significant problem of environment. The latter view indicate that despite having some inevitable problems, pollution is major concern these days. to put it more simply, since pollution level is increasing, it has deleterious effect on people's mental as well as Physical health. Furthermore, this can leads to many diseases. Thus, this issue must be mitigated by people. this are some other important environmental problems. In conclusion, it can be said that loss of some plants and animals are more important problem because of we can get some essential products. while, other trouble Like pollution is also big concern. Nevertheless, in my opinion, extinction of plants and animals are major environmental problems.
In this contemporary era, there are myriad of environmental
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problems
emerge. Society
is polarized
into two groups.
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Some
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people
deem that the most predominant trouble is extinction of
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some
flora and fauna. Whereas,
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some
individuals believe that
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other
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problem
like
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pollution
is more pivotal than
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plants
and creatures.
Hence
, I will discuss both perspectives and give your opinion in my forthcoming paragraphs.

First
time Paramount reason of the loss of
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plants
and
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animals
is that they are giving
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some
food
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products
as well
as
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other
resources. To elaborate it, plethora of
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plants
are useful for making
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some
crucial drugs
similarly
, Milk
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products
and
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other
things
are provided
us by
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animals
.
In addition
to this,
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some
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people
hunt innumerable innocent creatures for their
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own
benefit
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so
if they do not
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stop
hunting, individuals cannot
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get
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some
indispensable
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products
. An example to illustrate this point is that a survey conducted by
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government
of India in 2014
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showed
that there were
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only
2412 tigers
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left
out of 5000
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because
of hunting by humans. These are
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some
causes why
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plants
and
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animals
are significant
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problem
of environment.

The latter view indicate that despite having
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some
inevitable
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problems
,
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pollution
is major concern these days.
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to
put it more
simply
, since
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pollution
level is increasing, it has deleterious effect on
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people
's mental
as well
as Physical health.
Furthermore
, this can
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leads
to
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many
diseases.
Thus
, this issue
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must
be mitigated
by
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people
.
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this are
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some
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other
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important
environmental problems.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that loss of
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some
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plants
and
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animals
are more
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important
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problem
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because of we
can
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get
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some
essential
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products
.
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while
,
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other
trouble Like
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pollution
is
also
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big
concern.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion, extinction of
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plants
and
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animals
are major environmental
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problems
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a popular person who lives in your neighborhoodYou should say: - who she/he is- when you first met him/her- how you would describe his/her character- and say what the reason of his/her popularity is. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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