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Describe someone you know who does something well, you should say: Who this person isHow you know this personWhat they do wellAnd explain why you think this person is so good at doing this v.1

Describe someone you know who does something well, you should say: Who this person isHow you know this personWhat they do wellAnd explain why you think this person is so good at doing this v. 1
The rate of crimes is soaring daily in the present world. Without death deterrent the lives of people are less secure and as a result, there is a rise in vicious acts. Execution is mandatory to supervise brutality in the community. This essay will argue why judicial murder is necessary for oversight these violence in our civilization. To begin with, the death penalty is vital nowadays in the modern era because the degree of the act done is so heinous. Furthermore, if these laws are not implemented, there will be an increase in these illegal acts and the citizens of the nation would not be feeling safe in their own country. For example, a survey report submitted by the judicial system stated that in Saudi Arabia, the rate of offenders has decreased to 85% after they made stringent laws and the people feel safe in their kingdom. In contrast, we have seen over the years the rate of mischief in society is increasing yearly. Another reason is that the perpetrators are not punished and they are free after committing evil acts, which is a slap in the face to the victims of the nation. To illustrate, an article written in the Times Now newspaper stated, that nearly 90% of criminals are left free after they have done an evil act and the verdict in the court goes on for years and years, but still there is no justice delivered to the victims. To conclude, this essay argued why the evil doers should be punished by law to maintain peace, prosperity and security of all individuals.
The rate of crimes is soaring daily in the present world. Without death deterrent the
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lives
of
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people
are less secure and
as a result
, there is a rise in vicious
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acts
. Execution is mandatory to supervise brutality in the community. This essay will argue why judicial murder is necessary for oversight
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these violence
in our civilization.

To
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begin
with, the death penalty is vital nowadays in the modern era
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because
the degree of the
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act
done is
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so
heinous.
Furthermore
, if these laws are not implemented, there will be an increase in these illegal
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acts
and the citizens of the nation would not be feeling safe in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
country.
For example
, a survey report submitted by the judicial system stated that in Saudi Arabia, the rate of offenders has decreased to 85% after they made stringent laws and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
feel safe in their kingdom.

In contrast
, we have
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seen
over the years the rate of mischief in society is increasing yearly. Another reason is that the perpetrators are not
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punished and
they are free after committing evil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
acts
, which is a slap in the face to the victims of the nation. To illustrate, an article written in the Times
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
newspaper stated, that
nearly
90% of criminals are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
free after they have done an evil
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act
and the verdict in the court goes on for years and years,
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but
still
there is no justice delivered to the victims.

To conclude
, this essay argued why the evil doers should
be punished
by law to maintain peace, prosperity and security of all individuals.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe someone you know who does something well, you should say: Who this person isHow you know this personWhat they do wellAnd explain why you think this person is so good at doing this v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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