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Describe an interesting conversation you had with someone you didn't know. you should say: - who the person was -where the conversation took place -what you talked about -and explain why you found the conversation interesting v.1

Describe an interesting conversation you had with someone you didn't know. you should say: - who the person was -where the conversation took place -what you talked about -and explain why you found the conversation interesting v. 1
Nowadays, some people argue that work and study at the same time can result overwhelmed by the students, obstructing their time for education. In this essay I will explore some of the problems associated with this and suggest some solutions. Firstly, one problem with this issue is that some families don't have the necessary resources to provide help for their children and then pay their studies. As a result, they're obligated to work an amount of hours to pay their studies. A solution for that could be the support from the government. However, not always is possible to have this support, therefore, the students they are obligated to find a job. On the other hand, study and employment can be possible if the pupil knows how to combine these two. For instance, if their assignments suppose a lot of hours of concentration and dedication, the student can always talk with the school and extend their course or vice versa if their work allowed them to reduce the time of work always having in off resources to provide their classes. In other words, expanding the time of their studies or reducing the time of work, could be less stressful for them. To sum up, study and have a job at the same time can be difficult. Despite the problem of the money, if they need help always can have access to possible help thanks to the government or if they can't forward to this help always they have the possibility to talk with the school or work to extend their program of studies or reduce the amount of hours of work.
Nowadays,
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some
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people
argue that
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work
and
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study
at the same
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time
can result overwhelmed by the students, obstructing their
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time
for education. In this essay I will explore
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some of the
problems associated with this and suggest
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some
solutions.

Firstly
, one problem with this issue is that
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some
families don't have the necessary resources to provide
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help
for their children and then pay their
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studies
.
As a result
, they're obligated to
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work
an amount of hours to pay their
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studies
. A solution for that could be the support from the
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government
.
However
, not
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always is
possible to have this support,
therefore
, the students they
are obligated
to find a job.

On the other hand
,
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study
and employment can be possible if the pupil knows how to combine these two.
For instance
, if their assignments suppose
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a lot of
hours of concentration and dedication, the student can always talk with the school and extend their course or vice versa if their
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work
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allowed
them to
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reduce
the
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time
of
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work
always having in off resources to provide their classes.
In other words
, expanding the
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time
of their
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studies
or reducing the
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time
of
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work
, could be less stressful for them.

To sum up,
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study
and have a job at the same
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time
can be difficult. Despite the problem of the money, if they need
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help always
can have access to possible
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help
thanks to the
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government
or if they can't forward to this
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help always
they have the possibility to talk with the school or
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work
to extend their program of
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studies
or
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reduce
the amount of hours of
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work
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe an interesting conversation you had with someone you didn't know. you should say: - who the person was -where the conversation took place -what you talked about -and explain why you found the conversation interesting v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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