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Describe a TV programme that you have seen and interested you. You should say: - when and where you saw the programme - what happens during the programme - what you felt about the programme - and explain why you enjoyed the programme so much. v. 1

Sometimes, in interviews, some employers ask job candidates for personal data such as hobbies and interests, or family situation. Some people think that this info should be confidential and candidates for jobs don't have to give private data to employers. For instance, in a suburb of Paris, people applying for jobs said, in their Curriculum vitae, they lived in a very unpopular suburb and they practiced Rap Music. This person hasn't been chosen for the position while they had all the skills and degrees for it. In this case, personal information can be the cause of a kind of "discriminations". In the other hand, some employers prefer to have very united work's team because they think it's a factor to improve their ability in companies. In this case, personal info such as hobbies and interests could be very precious. Finally, a work's team who share the same interests and hobbies is more performance because of the good relationships between each member. Secondly, a man applying for jobs, who have hobbies and interests, shows that he has a balanced life. It's the same for a woman. In my opinion, give some personal information when I have an interview for a job could be a way of talking about me. I think an employer has to know which person he has in front of him. It's much more important if the position request responsibility. At final, even so sometimes it's not really relevant or useful to give personal information for people applying for a job, most of employers have to know their interests, hobbies, or familial situation.

IELTS essay Describe a TV programme that you have seen and interested you. You should say: - when and where you saw the programme - what happens during the programme - what you felt about the programme - and explain why you enjoyed the programme so much. v.1

Sometimes
, in interviews,
some
employers
ask
job
candidates for
personal
data such as
hobbies
and
interests
, or family situation.

Some
people
think
that this info should be confidential and candidates for
jobs
don't
have to
give private data to employers.

For instance
, in a suburb of Paris,
people
applying for
jobs
said, in their Curriculum vitae, they
lived
in a
very
unpopular
suburb and
they practiced Rap Music. This person hasn't
been chosen
for the position while they had all the
skills
and degrees for it.

In this case
,
personal
information can be the cause of a kind of
"
discriminations
"
.

In the other hand,
some
employers
prefer to have
very
united work's team
because
they
think
it's
a factor to
improve
their ability in
companies
.
In
this case,
personal
info such as
hobbies
and
interests
could be
very
precious.

Finally
, a work's team who share the same
interests
and
hobbies
is more performance
because
of the
good
relationships between each member.

Secondly
, a
man
applying for
jobs
, who have
hobbies
and
interests
,
shows
that he has a balanced life.
It's
the same for a woman.

In my opinion, give
some
personal
information when I have an interview for a
job
could be a way of talking about me. I
think
an
employer
has to
know which person he has in front of him.
It's
much more
important
if the position request responsibility.

At final, even
so
sometimes
it's
not
really
relevant or useful to give
personal
information for
people
applying for a
job
, most of
employers
have to
know their
interests
,
hobbies
, or familial situation.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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