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Describe how to use a piece of equipment you should say: - How often you use it- what you use it for- what you can do to be able to use it for a long time- and explain how to use it/its software/programmes/etc v.1

Describe how to use a piece of equipment you should say: - How often you use it- what you use it for- what you can do to be able to use it for a long time- and explain how to use it/its software/programmes/etc v. 1
Workers should elegant about their attire up in the opinion of some institutions, but others only focus on employment quality whether it is a highly debatable one. There are different companies on both sides of the debate who have their opinion based on their surroundings. There are some reasons that can lead one to go in favour of the worker's smart arrival. Firstly, several organizations that job with government projects concentrate on staff member presence because they have to join different meetings, presentations, etc. Most of the government organizations, strict to formal uniform up. Secondly, some companies think that the people who have nicely dressed, help to grow their confidence and they can perform better. So, they also try to maintain that they dressed up nicely. On the other hand, there are some companies who are trusted that not presentation, the production quality is more important. First at all, most of the private institutions that production based on technology, highly pay attention to their worker performances. They rely on that the hard effort and good achievement help to grow a company. Furthermore, some organization employees are not so rich. They can’t afford the fashionable or a costly formal gown. They wear anything and go to industry and the company trusts heir progress. Like garment factories, etc. In conclusion, I would like to state my opinion that I totally rely on performance neither than what they wear. I engaged in a software company, they also focus on the quality of performance. If they focus on clothes then it would difficult for the member.
Workers
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should elegant
about their attire up in the opinion of
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some
institutions,
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but
others
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only
focus on employment quality whether it is a
highly
debatable one. There are
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different
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companies
on both sides of the debate who have their opinion based on their surroundings.

There are
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some
reasons that can lead one to go in
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favour
of the worker's smart arrival.

Firstly
, several organizations that job with
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government
projects concentrate on staff member presence
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because
they
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have to
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join
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different
meetings, presentations, etc. Most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
organizations, strict to formal uniform up.
Secondly
,
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some
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companies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who have
nicely
dressed,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to grow their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
confidence and
they can perform better.
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So
, they
also
try to maintain that they dressed up
nicely
.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
who
are trusted
that not presentation, the production quality is more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
.
First
at all, most of the private institutions that production based on technology,
highly
pay attention to their worker performances. They rely on that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
effort and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
achievement
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to grow a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
organization employees are not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
rich. They can’t afford the fashionable or a costly formal gown. They wear anything and go to industry and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
trusts heir progress. Like garment factories, etc.

In conclusion
, I would like to state my opinion that I
totally
rely on performance neither than what they wear. I engaged in a software
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
, they
also
focus on the quality of performance. If they focus on clothes then it
It seems that a verb or adverb has been misspelled or is missing here.
would difficult
for the member.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe how to use a piece of equipment you should say: - How often you use it- what you use it for- what you can do to be able to use it for a long time- and explain how to use it/its software/programmes/etc v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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