Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Describe a film that had a great impression on you. You should say: - when and where you saw it- what type of film it is- what happens in the film - and explain why you found it so impressive. v.1

Describe a film that had a great impression on you. You should say: - when and where you saw it- what type of film it is- what happens in the film - and explain why you found it so impressive. v. 1
Some people claim that music has the capacity to connect and unite people from a variety of backgrounds. Personally, I completely agree with this view and shall outline my reasons below. To begin with, music can absolutely overcome national boundaries and bring people around the world together. The best example would be Taylor Swift, a famous pop star, _hosting_ an international music concert _in the UK back in 2012, which was broadcasted_ to _a_ global audience. The concert was, in actuality, a fundraising campaign for charities in the UK and a resounding success, both in terms of the great number of people who became its spectators and their impact on public awareness of the ongoing famine. Hence, I believe music is a global planet's language. Continuing on, music has the ability to enhance the feelings of people, such as their happiness, anger and sadness _, _ regardless of their country of origin. Although _music may have lyrics that are_ incomprehensible, its melody is linguistically neutral to all people. For instance, an Indonesian person may fall in love with a _Korean_ pop song or may shed tears listening to a melancholic elegy written by a Japanese musician. In fact, in order to appreciate the melody of _a musical composition_, the listener does not need to fully understand _the language in_ which the song is written. Therefore, it is clear evidence that music is a universal language that transcends all cultural boundaries within people. In summary, I believe music is an art that can be essential to people's lives. It can act as a powerful means of uniting people of different nations, regardless of culture, age, religion and language.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
claim that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
has the capacity to connect and unite
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from a variety of backgrounds.
Personally
, I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this view and shall outline my reasons below.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
can
absolutely
overcome national boundaries and bring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
around the world together. The best example would be Taylor Swift, a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
pop star, _hosting_ an international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
concert _in the UK back in 2012, which was broadcasted_ to _a_ global audience. The concert was, in actuality, a fundraising campaign for charities in the UK and a resounding success, both in terms of the great number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who became its spectators and their impact on public awareness of the ongoing famine.
Hence
, I believe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
is a global planet's language.

Continuing on,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
has the ability to enhance the feelings of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, such as their happiness, anger and sadness _, _ regardless of their country of origin. Although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
_music
may have lyrics that are_ incomprehensible, its melody is
linguistically
neutral to all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
For instance
, an Indonesian person may fall in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
with a _Korean_ pop song or may shed tears listening to a melancholic elegy written by a Japanese musician. In fact, in order to appreciate the melody of _a musical composition_, the listener does not need to
fully
understand _the language in_ which the song
is written
.
Therefore
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
evidence that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
is a universal language that transcends all cultural boundaries within
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

In summary, I believe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
is an art that can be essential to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. It can act as a powerful means of uniting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
nations, regardless of culture, age, religion and language.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Describe a film that had a great impression on you. You should say: - when and where you saw it- what type of film it is- what happens in the film - and explain why you found it so impressive. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts