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Describe a film or a TV programme which has made a strongimpression on you. You should say: what kind of film or TV programme it was, e. g. comedywhen you saw the film or TV programmewhat the film or TV programme was aboutand explain why this film or TV prog v.1

Describe a film or a TV programme which has made a strongimpression on you. You should say: what kind of film or TV programme it was, e. g. comedywhen you saw the film or TV programmewhat the film or TV programme was aboutand explain why this film or TV prog v. 1
Although it is sometimes considered that the well-being of each person should be their concern, others think the administrations should be in charge of the nationals' dietary regimen. In my own view, I consider the fitness of a person is their personal obligation. On the one hand, it is thought that since every individual who neglects their health will bear the effects of infirmity, then they should make their healthiness an utmost duty and I agree. In other words, if people fail to concentrate on taking proper meals and being healthy, then they will have to face the consequences of ill-health themselves. For example, a person who suffers from food poisoning, will feel the discomfort and also have to make financial sacrifices by settling hospital bills. Furthermore, when people take charge of their own well-being, they are more likely to be healthier and can become more productive. Besides, the well-being of people could be an indication of good governance and ensure better stability in the society. On the other hand, other people believe the leaders of a country should be saddled with the task of ensuring all residents obtain perfect diets. Whereas every single person bears the discomfort of sickness, the government becomes negatively affected in the case of an epidemic. For instance, the outbreak of Ebola in some parts of Africa led to citizens fleeing their countries in fear of contracting the disease, thereby reducing manpower in such countries. In conclusion, despite conflicting views on whose duty it is to ensure good health and balanced meals of people, I believe every entity should be responsible for their own fitness to avoid the negative constraints of unhealthiness.
Although it is
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sometimes
considered that the well-being of each
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person
should be their concern, others
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think
the administrations should be in charge of the nationals' dietary regimen. In my
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own
view, I consider the fitness of a
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person
is their personal obligation.

On the one hand, it is
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thought
that since every individual who neglects their health will bear the effects of infirmity, then they should
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make
their healthiness an utmost duty and I
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agree
. In
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other
words, if
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people
fail to concentrate on taking proper meals and being healthy, then they will
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have to
face the consequences of ill-health themselves.
For example
, a
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person
who suffers from food poisoning, will feel the discomfort and
also
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have to
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make
financial sacrifices by settling hospital bills.
Furthermore
, when
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people
take charge of their
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own
well-being, they are more likely to be healthier and can become more productive.
Besides
, the well-being of
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people
could be an indication of
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good
governance and ensure better stability in the society.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
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people
believe the leaders of a country should
be saddled
with the task of ensuring all residents obtain perfect diets. Whereas every single
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person
bears the discomfort of sickness, the
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government
becomes
negatively
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affected
in the case of an epidemic.
For instance
, the outbreak of Ebola in
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some
parts of Africa led to citizens fleeing their countries in fear of contracting the disease, thereby reducing manpower in such countries.

In conclusion
, despite conflicting views on whose duty it is to ensure
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good
health and balanced meals of
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people
, I believe every entity should be responsible for their
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own
fitness to avoid the
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negative
constraints of unhealthiness.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a film or a TV programme which has made a strongimpression on you. You should say: what kind of film or TV programme it was, e. g. comedywhen you saw the film or TV programmewhat the film or TV programme was aboutand explain why this film or TV prog v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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