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Some people trust their first impressions about a person’s character because they believe these judgments are generally correct. Other people do not judge a person’s character quickly because they believe first impressions are wrong. Get ready to talk to an examiner about this issue. v.1

Some people trust their first impressions about a person’s character because they believe these judgments are generally correct. Other people do not judge a person’s character quickly because they believe first impressions are wrong. Get ready to talk to an examiner about this issue. v. 1
As we all know, some people quickly jump into conclusions about a person’s character solely based on their first impression on the person but others try not to so. In my opinion, I myself incompletely with this inasmuch as it can be misleadind To begin with, those who always trusts first impressions about a person's character are misleading. There is a Chinese saying: we cannot judge a person by his appearance. That is, the appearance is not always telling the truth. One of my neighbours is a good-looking girl who seems appealing. I thought she was warm-hearted and willing to help others. Nevertheless, after personal contacts with her, I find she is bad tempted and particularly with peels, thus do not get along with others. Moreover, a judgment from first impressions is too hasty. The judgment of a person's character should be careful because it affects not only two parties. With different cultural backgrounds, different people have distinct impressions of a given person. Suppose you think a girl with short skirt is misbehaviour, while I believe she is open-minded and energetic. Therefore, without further communication or observation, you cannot persuade me to share your view, neither can I. Last but not least, first impressions are always made on purpose and they are not worth of trust. For example, in a recruitment meeting, a girl wears neatly and shows much respect to every person. In fact, she is pleasing every one for the position. However, in the second interview, we find she is too flattering and not considerate. In this case, further contacts give us more accurate information about her character. From all the discussions above, I could safely arrive at my conclusion that although the first impression can tell something about a person's character, we should not trust it and take it for granted that it is correct. It is more responsible to make further judgments and leave the first impressions as reference.
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character
solely
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first
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person
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others try not to
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. In my opinion, I myself
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misleadind


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begin
with, those who always trusts
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first
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impressions
about a person's
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character
are misleading. There is a Chinese saying: we cannot judge a
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person
by his appearance.
That is
, the appearance is not always telling the truth. One of my
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neighbours
is a
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good
-looking girl who seems appealing. I
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thought
she was warm-hearted and willing to
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help
others.
Nevertheless
, after personal contacts with her, I find she is
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bad
tempted and
particularly
with peels,
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get
along with others.

Moreover
, a judgment from
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impressions
is too hasty. The judgment of a person's
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character
should be careful
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two parties. With
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different
cultural backgrounds,
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different
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people
have distinct
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impressions
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person
. Suppose you
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think
a girl with short skirt is
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misbehaviour
, while I believe she is open-minded and energetic.
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further
communication or observation, you cannot persuade me to share your view, neither can I.

Last
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not least,
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first
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impressions
are always made on
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purpose and
they are not worth of trust.
For example
, in a recruitment meeting, a girl wears
neatly
and
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shows
much respect to every
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person
. In fact, she
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is pleasing
every one for the position.
However
, in the second interview, we find she is too flattering and not considerate.
In this case
,
further
contacts give us more accurate information about her character.

From all the discussions above, I could
safely
arrive at my conclusion that although the
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first
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impression
can
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tell
something about a person's
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character
, we should not trust it and take it for granted that it is correct. It is more responsible to
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make
further
judgments and
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leave
the
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first
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impressions
as reference.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Some people trust their first impressions about a person’s character because they believe these judgments are generally correct. Other people do not judge a person’s character quickly because they believe first impressions are wrong. Get ready to talk to an examiner about this issue. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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