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Describe a personal achievement you are proud of. You should say: what you achievedwhen you achieved itwhat was difficult about achieving itand explain why you are proud of this achievement v.1

Describe a personal achievement you are proud of. You should say: what you achievedwhen you achieved itwhat was difficult about achieving itand explain why you are proud of this achievement v. 1
Undoubtedly, the environmental problems have now become one of the most serious problems worldwide. Some people consider that environmental problems to be removed on global or national basis. In my opinion countries should work to gather to tackle this issue of the environment. To sum up this essay will be discuss the role of cooperation countries in environmental problems. On the one hand, some people think that the environmental problems it is a global issue and must be resolved universally, for example the global warming has now one of the most important problems in worldwide that affects the melting of ice and rising seawater if developing countries can help to provide technology the process of dealing with environmental issues would be much quicker. Cooperation countries with together is possible tackle. On the other hand, some people think that the environmental problems has issued nationally and can tackle with them, for example, the drying of lake Urmia in Iran is an internal problem and other countries cannot help. So I believe that any country can develop knowledge and industry cause reduce environmental pollution while developing countries such as some nations in Africa are increasing clean water resources is their top priority. Finally, in my view, both methods are important to handle environmental issues, but tackling these issues nationally or on a global scale is true depends on destructive level of the issue In conclusion, both Viwe beneficial and affection tackle environmental problems. Although it may seem easier to solve the environmental problems nationally in practice, dealing with this issues more effective when working on a global scale.
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, the
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environmental
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problems
have
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now
become one of the most serious
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problems
worldwide.
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Some
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people
consider that
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environmental
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problems
to
be removed
on
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global
or national basis. In my opinion
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countries
should work to gather to tackle this
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issue
of the environment. To sum up this essay will be
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discuss
the role of cooperation
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countries
in
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environmental
problems.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
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think
that the
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environmental
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problems
it is a
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global
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issue
and
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must
be resolved
universally
,
for example
the
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global
warming has
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now
one of the most
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important
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problems
in worldwide that affects the melting of ice and rising seawater if developing
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countries
can
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help
to provide technology the process of dealing with
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environmental
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issues
would be much quicker. Cooperation
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countries
with together is possible tackle.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
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think
that the
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environmental
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problems
has issued
nationally
and can tackle with them,
for example
, the drying of lake
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Urmia
in Iran is an internal
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problem
and other
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countries
cannot
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help
.
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I believe that any
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country
can develop knowledge and industry cause
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reduce
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environmental
pollution while developing
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countries
such as
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some
nations in Africa are increasing clean water resources is their top priority.
Finally
, in my view, both methods are
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important
to handle
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environmental
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issues
,
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but
tackling these
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issues
nationally
or on a
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global
scale is true depends on destructive level of the issue

In conclusion
, both
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Viwe
beneficial and affection tackle
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environmental
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problems
. Although it may seem easier to solve the
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environmental
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problems
nationally
in practice, dealing with
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this
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issues
more effective when working on a
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global
scale.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a personal achievement you are proud of. You should say: what you achievedwhen you achieved itwhat was difficult about achieving itand explain why you are proud of this achievement v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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