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Describe a newspaper or magazine you enjoy reading. You should say: What kind of newspaper / magazine it isWhich parts of it you read regularlyWhen and where you read itExplain why you enjoy reading it v.1

Describe a newspaper or magazine you enjoy reading. You should say: What kind of newspaper / magazine it isWhich parts of it you read regularlyWhen and where you read itExplain why you enjoy reading it v. 1
Technology is developing at an unstoppable speed which shows in the number and style of items such as computers, laptops, mobile phones, iPads. . . . There are many people said that new new inventions are threatening our traditions all over the world. However, the concern is whether new products related can help maintain our beloved traditions in any way. We must admit that new high-tech is the good effect of creativeness. There is a fact that we have many companies, which are in varying sizes and different parts, try to produce new technological items all the time. It might be the commercial require of the international market, it also can be the effort of the scientists. The products aim to be better and better, newer and newer in comparison with the old versions. It means that something old should be replaced by the new one which is improved from the original. The new technology is based on the older while the oldest one root was from the traditions. Thereby, new technology is using and developing from the traditions, even it raises the tradition to reach a new rank in its progress. For instance, we used hand-written letters to keep in touch before the media means appeared. By the time, phones and computers, iPad were invented along side with the Internet explosion. On the one hand, people feel that it's easier to connect with others, not only our relatives, but also our friends who we have never met before. On the other hand, some people said that it killed the beautiful tradition of us - handwritten letter communication. There is something we need to be clear here, phone calls, video calls don't make the hand-written letter communication method to be blurred but more outstanding. A hand-written letter is much more valuable than a phone call or a video call which we do not need much time to create. In conclusion, we need to accept that new technology are pushing our traditions to a higher position than their current levels. Change is not something bad but an essential step in our evolution.
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Technology
is developing at an unstoppable speed which
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shows
in the number and style of items such as computers, laptops, mobile
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phones
, iPads.
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.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
There are
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many
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people
said that
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new
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new
inventions are threatening our
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traditions
all over the world.
However
, the concern is whether
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new
products related can
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help
maintain our beloved
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traditions
in any way.

We
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must
admit that
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new
high-tech is the
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good
effect of creativeness. There is a fact that we have
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many
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companies
, which are in varying sizes and
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different
parts, try to produce
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
technological items all the time. It might be the commercial require of the international market, it
also
can be the effort of the scientists. The products aim to be better and better, newer and newer
in comparison
with the
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old
versions. It means that something
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old
should
be replaced
by the
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new
one which is
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improved
from the original. The
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new
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technology
is based
on the older while the oldest one root was from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditions
. Thereby,
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new
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technology
is using and developing from the
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traditions
, even it raises the
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tradition
to reach a
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new
rank in its progress.

For instance
, we
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used
hand-written
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letters
to
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keep
in touch
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before
the media means appeared. By the time,
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phones
and computers, iPad
were invented
Did you mean "alongside"?
along side
with the Internet explosion. On the one hand,
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people
feel that it's easier to connect with others, not
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only
our relatives,
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but
also
our friends who we have never met
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before
.
On the other hand
,
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some
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people
said that it killed the
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beautiful
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tradition
of us
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
handwritten
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letter
communication. There is something we need to be
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clear
here,
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phone
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calls
, video
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calls
don't
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make
the hand-written
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letter
communication method to
be blurred
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but
more outstanding. A hand-written
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letter
is much more valuable than a
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phone
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call
or a video
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call
which we do not need much time to create.

In conclusion
, we need to accept that
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new
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technology
are pushing our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditions
to a higher position than their
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current
levels.
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Change
is not something
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bad
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but
an essential step in our evolution.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a newspaper or magazine you enjoy reading. You should say: What kind of newspaper / magazine it isWhich parts of it you read regularlyWhen and where you read itExplain why you enjoy reading it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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