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Describe a law in your home country, that you feel is very good for people. Please say- What is it? - How did you get to know about this law? - Why do you think it is good for people? v.1

Describe a law in your home country, that you feel is very good for people. Please say- What is it? - How did you get to know about this law? - Why do you think it is good for people? v. 1
Of all the varying problems that the world faces these days, stress is a major one. In this essay I would discuss some important reasons why a person gets stressed out and would propose a few solutions to overcome this menace. Firstly, people get stressed out because of the tremendous workload that they come across. For example, people working in offices face the pressure to complete certain tasks in a limited time period, failing which there is a high probability of them losing their jobs. Similarly, students feel a lot of pressure when they must finish the assignments and projects before a given deadline. This can be helped if, for instance, the office work is evenly distributed among all the employees and a suitable time frame is given to finish the task. The colleges and universities must make sure to structure the curriculum wisely such that students are not overburdened at any point of time. Secondly, nowadays, the mental health of people is getting disturbed because they get involved in wrong relationships. For instance, getting married at a younger age without being financially stable brings a lot of stress to a person when it comes to fulfilling the responsibilities of a family. Moreover, it increases the number of divorces and broken relationships. Therefore, in order to avoid creating undue anxiety in a relationship one must not hurry in taking the important decisions of life, such as hurrying into marriage. To conclude, stress is an overgrowing problem in our society. In order to get rid of it, we must consider the main reasons behind it and take appropriate actions to counter this serious threat to mental health.
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stress
is a major one. In this essay I would discuss
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some
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important
reasons why a person
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gets
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stressed
out and would propose a few solutions to overcome this menace.

Firstly
,
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people
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get
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stressed
out
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because
of the tremendous workload that they
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come
across.
For example
,
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people
working in offices face the pressure to complete certain tasks in a limited time period, failing which there is a high probability of them losing their jobs.
Similarly
, students feel
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a lot of
pressure when they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
finish the assignments and projects
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before
a
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given
deadline. This can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
if,
for instance
, the office work is
evenly
distributed among all the employees and a suitable time frame is
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given
to finish the task. The colleges and universities
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must
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make
sure to structure the curriculum
wisely
such that students are not overburdened at any point of time.

Secondly
, nowadays, the mental health of
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people
is getting disturbed
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because
they
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get
involved in
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wrong
relationships.
For instance
, getting married at a younger age without being
financially
stable brings
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a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
to a person when it
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comes
to fulfilling the responsibilities of a family.
Moreover
, it increases the number of divorces and broken relationships.
Therefore
, in order to avoid creating undue anxiety in a relationship one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
not hurry in taking the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
decisions of life, such as hurrying into marriage.

To conclude
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
is an overgrowing problem in our society. In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
rid of it, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
consider the main reasons behind it and take appropriate actions to counter this serious threat to mental health.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Describe a law in your home country, that you feel is very good for people. Please say- What is it? - How did you get to know about this law? - Why do you think it is good for people? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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