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Talk about an object you have bought recently, that you did not use. Please say- What is it? - When and where did you buy it? - Why did you buy it? - Explain why you did not use it. v.1

Talk about an object you have bought recently, that you did not use. Please say- What is it? - When and where did you buy it? - Why did you buy it? - Explain why you did not use it. v. 1
Nowadays, some people advocate that students don't need to go to the real classroom, instead they can attend it online, directly from their homes. In my opinion, I utterly believe that physical presence in educational institutions is the only way to make the best of students. Firstly, I would take myself as an example, because during my university I passed some of the online courses. Thus, I can say that the quality of a knowledge gained is not the same and I had many questions while I had watched videos, but I couldn’t make any questions. It's only a one way type of communication. Furthermore, our focus is much better when we are in the same room as a professor, and we can better experience the topic that is being presented. Secondly, the school plays a very important role in our lives and the most significant thing provided is process of socialization. We spend a third of our childhood time in and around the classroom learning not only from professors but also from our friends and we shape our personalities. That is the place where we meet our first friends, we make a wide number of contacts and some people can even find their future partner there; therefore, the school cannot be replaced to any virtual platform. To sum up, I think the moment we start to transform our society into virtual one will be the end of civilization as we know today. Hence, the human beings will not use their full social and intellectual potential and that we will stagnate. I'm afraid even to imagine what would happen if we take out schools and move classrooms to online platforms.
Nowadays,
some
people
advocate that students don't need to go to the real classroom,
instead
they can attend it online,
directly
from their homes. In my opinion, I
utterly
believe that physical presence in educational institutions is the
only
way to
make
the best of students.

Firstly
, I would take myself as an example,
because
during my university I passed
some of the
online courses.
Thus
, I can say that the quality of a knowledge gained is not the same and I had
many
questions while I had
watched
videos,
but
I couldn’t
make
any questions. It's
only
a one way type of communication.
Furthermore
, our focus is much better when we are in the same room as a professor, and we can better experience the topic
that is
being presented
.

Secondly
, the school plays a
very
important
role in our
lives
and the most significant thing provided is process of socialization. We spend a third of our childhood time in and around the classroom learning not
only
from professors
but
also
from our
friends and
we shape our personalities.
That is
the place where we
meet
our
first
friends, we
make
a wide number of contacts and
some
people
can even find their future partner there;
therefore
, the school cannot
be replaced
to any virtual platform.

To sum up, I
think
the moment we
start
to transform our society into virtual one will be the
end
of civilization as we know
today
.
Hence
, the human beings will not
use
their full social and intellectual potential and that we will stagnate. I'm
afraid even
to imagine what would happen if we take out schools and
move
classrooms to online platforms.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about an object you have bought recently, that you did not use. Please say- What is it? - When and where did you buy it? - Why did you buy it? - Explain why you did not use it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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