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The graph below CO2 emission for different forms of transport in the European union. The pie chart shows the percentage of European union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v.2

The graph below CO2 emission for different forms of transport in the European union. The pie chart shows the percentage of European union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 2
It is give two chart bar graph reveal that informantion about representation Co2 emission for kind forms of transport in the European union. secondly circular charts depicts the proportion of European union funds being spent on various forms of transport. It is clearly seen that, in the chart grams of Co2 per passenger used the air then it had higher percentage on the chart. Therefore, maritime and rail was similar proportion of 50. However, the coaches had very declined passenger use it. on the other hand, the pie chart illustrate the percentage of European union funds of most of roads through it was fall up proportion in the chart. After that, the railways was nearly reduce compared to roads. Furthermore, the public transport was only 10 porproption. lastly, five transport had very decreased funds just over1 to 2 percentage. To sum up, most of passenger used the air transport European union. Thus, roads used in anytime. it had huge proportion in the chart.
It is give two
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chart
bar
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graph
reveal that
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informantion
about representation Co2 emission for kind forms of
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transport
in the
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European union
.
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secondly
circular
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charts
depicts the
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proportion
of
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European union
funds
being spent
on various forms of transport.

It is
clearly
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seen
that, in the
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chart
grams of Co2 per passenger
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used
the air then it had higher percentage on the
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chart
.
Therefore
, maritime and rail was similar
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proportion
of 50.
However
, the coaches had
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very
declined passenger
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use
it.

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on
the other hand, the pie
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chart
illustrate the percentage of
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European union
funds of
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most of roads
through it was fall up
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proportion
in the
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chart
. After that, the railways was
nearly
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reduce
compared to roads.
Furthermore
, the public
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transport
was
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only
10
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porproption
.
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lastly
, five
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transport
had
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very
decreased funds
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just
over1 to 2 percentage.

To sum up,
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most of passenger
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used
the air
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transport
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European union
.
Thus
, roads
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used
in anytime.
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it
had huge
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proportion
in the
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chart
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay The graph below CO2 emission for different forms of transport in the European union. The pie chart shows the percentage of European union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
163 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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