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Describe a good habit that your friend has, and that you would like to develop too. Please say- Who is you friend? - What habit is it? - Why do you want to develop it? v.1

Describe a good habit that your friend has, and that you would like to develop too. Please say- Who is you friend? - What habit is it? - Why do you want to develop it? v. 1
The menace of nuclear weapon supports the world balance. Despite the nuclear weapon is the main key to containing national interests of countries, it is a hazardous tool to destroy our planet. In my opinion, in this globalizing world the humanity should give up from this weapon for supporting peace, and start solving conflicts through the international law. The greatest benefit from the nuclear weapon is that it provides the guarantee for peace, and creates a fear response between the emerging countries. When ambition of powerful countries is increasing, they start off invasions and try to establish the hegemony. The history shows that the main reasons for this are territorial and economic interests. The growing of population is triggered the countries such as the USA, China, India to demonstrate their power to the countries of the third world. Theory the classical realism claims that the International Organizations will not able to insure the world peace until the countries will grow their military powers. The experience of the nuclear powers of countries has been led to a massive consequences for the world. Utilizing the nuclear weapon has the detrimental effects on health of generations and the environment. For example, although the Soviet Union has tested the nuclear weapon in our territory three decades ago, it still has caused a hazard obstacle for extinction of people around the city Semey. Hence, it is clearly shown that consequence of using this weapon impact on not only for people, but also for our environment. In conclusion, nuclear weapon has more disadvantages than advantages for humanity.
The menace of nuclear
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weapon
supports the
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world
balance. Despite the nuclear
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weapon
is the main key to containing national interests of
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countries
, it is a hazardous tool to
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destroy
our planet. In my opinion, in this globalizing
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world
the humanity should give up from this
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weapon
for supporting peace, and
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start
solving conflicts through the international law.

The greatest benefit from the nuclear
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weapon
is that it provides the guarantee for peace, and creates a fear response between the emerging
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countries
. When ambition of powerful
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countries
is increasing, they
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start
off invasions and try to establish the hegemony. The history
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shows
that the main reasons for this are territorial and economic interests. The growing of population
is triggered
the
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countries
such as the USA, China, India to demonstrate their power to the
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countries
of the third
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world
. Theory the classical realism claims that the International Organizations will not able to insure the
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world
peace until the
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countries
will grow their military powers.

The experience of the nuclear powers of
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countries
has
been led
to a massive
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consequences
for the
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world
. Utilizing the nuclear
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weapon
has the detrimental effects on health of generations and the environment.
For example
, although the Soviet Union has
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tested
the nuclear
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weapon
in our territory three decades ago, it
still
has caused a hazard obstacle for extinction of
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people
around the city
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Semey
.
Hence
, it is
clearly
shown that consequence of using this
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weapon
impact on not
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only
for
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people
,
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but
also
for our environment.

In conclusion
, nuclear
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weapon
has more disadvantages than advantages for humanity.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a good habit that your friend has, and that you would like to develop too. Please say- Who is you friend? - What habit is it? - Why do you want to develop it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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