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1. Some people believe that studying at university or college is a route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discus both views. v.1

1. Some people believe that studying at university or college is a route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discus both views. v. 1
The similarity among nations is increasing considerably due to the same goods can be purchased anywhere globally. I think this is a positive development because there will be better economy and lowered transfer rates. There are a number of reasons this trend is optimistic. Firstly, these nations economy will be awesome. This is because these countries will give a maximum focus improving their products and services on their own since the same produce can be seen anywhere. Therefore, there will now be cash circulations within the nation. For example, a study shows that a country producing the same goods as other countries tends to have little risk of economical crisis. Another reason for this is that rate of transportation will be reduced drastically. These individuals will no longer opt in travelling to buy goods from other nationalities. China and USA, for instance, both involve in almost the same medical services, so the need of travelling to get medical attention by citizens is unwanted. Thus, travelling is on the low side if same produce can be purchased any place in the world. In conclusion, citizens can indulge in equal services in several locations around the globe thereby making countries similar. This has brought about a positive trend because it will cut off rate of travelling and improve the economy of countries.
The similarity among nations is increasing
considerably
due to the same
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goods
can be
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purchased
anywhere globally. I
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think
this is a
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positive
development
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because
there will be better economy and lowered transfer rates.

There are a number of reasons this trend is optimistic.
Firstly
, these
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nations
economy will be awesome. This is
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because
these
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countries
will give a maximum focus improving their products and services on their
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own
since the same produce can be
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seen
anywhere.
Therefore
, there will
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now
be cash circulations within the nation.
For example
, a study
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shows
that a
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country
producing the same
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goods
as other
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countries
tends to have
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little
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risk
of
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economical
crisis.

Another reason for this is that rate of transportation will be
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reduced
drastically
. These individuals will no longer opt in
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travelling
to
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buy
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goods
from other nationalities. China and USA,
for instance
, both involve in almost the same medical services,
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so
the need of
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travelling
to
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get
medical attention by citizens
is unwanted
.
Thus
,
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travelling
is on the low side if same produce can be
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purchased
any place in the world.

In conclusion
, citizens can indulge in equal services in several locations around the globe thereby making
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countries
similar. This has brought about a
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positive
trend
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because
it will
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cut
off rate of
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travelling
and
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improve
the economy of
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countries
.
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IELTS essay 1. Some people believe that studying at university or college is a route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discus both views. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
220 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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