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Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school. You should say: When and where you started studying it What lessons were like What made the subject different from other subjects And explain why you enjoyed the subject v.1

Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school. You should say: When and where you started studying it What lessons were like What made the subject different from other subjects And explain why you enjoyed the subject v. 1
Nowadays there is the opinion based on the idea that the government should not spend a lot of money on art industry and it is better to support other parts of the society. This essay disagrees that there are other more important issues where the government should invest more money than on the arts. Firstly, this essay will prove the idea of positive craft influence on human mental health and secondly, it will show how important is to develop art industry in order to make it the evidence of the epoch. To begin with, thousands of years art is playing a significant part of human’s life. It allows them not only to create something fascinating and beautiful, but also to relieve stress, express their emotions and get away from bad thoughts. For example, a lot psychologists advise their patients attend different craft workshops in order to give their brain some time to rest and such art therapies definitely should be supported. Also, no doubt, that art is one of the main signs of the time. Through the craft people have a chance to understand the thoughts, ideas and fears of their ancestors. For instance, ancient people made a lot of drawings on the walls of the caves, where they have been living thousands of years and now, they greatly help historians to recreate and realize our own history. To sum up, the art industry definitely should be supported by the authorities in order to help the citizens to overcome their life problems through art therapies and let people expresses their ideas and thoughts.
Nowadays there is the opinion based on the
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idea
that the
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government
should not spend
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a lot of
money on
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art
industry and it is better to support other parts of the society. This essay disagrees that there are other more
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important
issues where the
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government
should invest more money than on the
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arts
.
Firstly
, this essay will prove the
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idea
of
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positive
craft influence on human mental health and
secondly
, it will
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show
how
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important
is to develop
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art
industry in order to
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make
it the evidence of the epoch.

To
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begin
with, thousands of years
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art
is playing a significant part of human’s life. It
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allows
them not
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only
to create something fascinating and
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beautiful
,
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but
also
to relieve
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stress
, express their emotions and
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get
away from
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bad
thoughts.
For example
,
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a lot psychologists
advise their patients attend
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different
craft workshops in order to give their brain
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some
time to rest and such
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art
therapies definitely should
be supported
.

Also
, no doubt, that
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art
is one of the main signs of the time. Through the craft
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people
have a chance to understand the thoughts,
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ideas
and fears of their ancestors.
For instance
, ancient
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people
made
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a lot of
drawings on the walls of the caves, where they have been living thousands of years and
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now
, they
greatly
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help
historians to recreate and realize our
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own
history.

To sum up, the
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art
industry definitely should
be supported
by the authorities in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the citizens to overcome their life problems through
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art
therapies and
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let
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people
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expresses
their
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ideas
and thoughts.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school. You should say: When and where you started studying it What lessons were like What made the subject different from other subjects And explain why you enjoyed the subject v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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