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Describe a friend that you remember from school. Please say- What was she/he like? - Where and when did you first meet? - Why do you still remember him/her? v.1

Describe a friend that you remember from school. Please say- What was she/he like? - Where and when did you first meet? - Why do you still remember him/her? v. 1
The need for food products is rapidly increasing around the world. According to the UN, the need for food supply is expected to rise up to 90% by 2050. This essay will explore the reasons for food shortage and will suggest possible solution for this issue. One of the main factors that cause the raising food demand is the growing world population. Today, it estimated that the number of people live on the planet is 7 billion, and it continues to increase. As the number of consumers increase, farmers struggle to produce the amount of produce that meet their needs. Another factor that contributes to this problem is the change of diet in the developing nations. This is because in the countries that experiencing economic growth, people are becoming richer. Consequently, they consume more meat and dairy products. For instance, in China, the amount of milk consumption has increased significantly increased in the last decade. Many policies should be introduced to tackle the problem of inadequate food supply. For example, the global agricultural organisations should revised farming practices across the globe. Farmers should be supported to increase their crop yield. They should learn how to use water and fertilisers efficiently. Furthermore, many farmlands are used to grow crops for animal feed rather than feed people directly. This waste precious resources and considered to be an ineffective utilisation of farmland. In addition, countries should do more to decrease their food waste. It is estimated that have of the food produced globally is wasted due to ineffective storage and bad marketing. In conclusion, global food demand is growing due to the increase in world population, and the change in diet in some part of the world. International organisations should regulate farming practices, and assist farmers to increase their food production. In addition, strict regulations must be introduced to limit food waste.
The need for
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food
products is
rapidly
increasing around the
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world
. According to the UN, the need for
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food
supply is
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expected
to rise up to 90% by 2050. This essay will explore the reasons for
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food
shortage and will suggest possible solution for this issue.

One of the main factors that cause the raising
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food
demand is the growing
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world
population.
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Today
, it estimated that the number of
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people
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live
on the planet is 7 billion, and it continues to
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increase
. As the number of consumers
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increase
, farmers struggle to produce the amount of produce that
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meet
their needs. Another factor that contributes to this problem is the
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change
of diet in the developing nations. This is
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because
in the countries that experiencing economic growth,
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people
are becoming richer.
Consequently
, they consume more meat and dairy products.
For instance
, in China, the amount of milk consumption has increased
significantly
increased in the last decade.

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Many
policies should
be introduced
to tackle the problem of inadequate
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food
supply.
For example
, the global agricultural
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organisations
should
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revised
farming practices across the globe. Farmers should
be supported
to
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increase
their crop yield. They should learn how to
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use
water and
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fertilisers
efficiently
.
Furthermore
,
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many
farmlands are
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used
to grow crops for animal feed
rather
than feed
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people
directly
. This waste precious resources and considered to be an ineffective
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utilisation
of farmland.
In addition
, countries should do more to decrease their
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food
waste. It
is estimated
that have of the
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food
produced globally
is wasted
due to ineffective storage and
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bad
marketing.

In conclusion
, global
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food
demand is growing due to the
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increase
in
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world
population, and the
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change
in diet in
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some
part of the
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world
. International
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organisations
should regulate farming practices, and assist farmers to
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increase
their
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food
production.
In addition
, strict regulations
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must
be introduced
to limit
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food
waste.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a friend that you remember from school. Please say- What was she/he like? - Where and when did you first meet? - Why do you still remember him/her? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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