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You are working in an international company. You want to quit this job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, you should say: •Why you want to quit•When you want to leave•What you liked about the company. v.1

You are working in an international company. You want to quit this job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, you should say: •Why you want to quit•When you want to leave•What you liked about the company. v. 1
Some people are of the opinion that music is a good source to unite people, despite having diverse cultures and ages. I strongly disagree with this point of view for two main reasons; language barriers and choice of music based on generational disparity. The first reason I tend to believe why it is not a likable way to connect people from various ages is the difference in music preferences of the old and new generation depending upon their period of popular music. Before the modern instruments were invented, the earlier contemporaries were much more inclined towards the kind of music that had meaningful lyrics. Moreover, it has also been observed that people with older traditions complain about the type of music youngsters are currently addicted to. For instance, having carried out recent research, it is analysed that 90% of the people from the current generation would choose to listen to rap rather than slow and classical music. Thus, music can not help diminish this generational gap among people. Secondly, not only the culture but also the language is an intangible barrier to interact with foreigners. Despite the fact that music is not as semantically concrete as language, every musical phrase creates a specific emotion that can only be followed by the people with a similar mode of communication. In addition to that, the range of music is quite wide so it provides people an option to select the music they understand. Another example is the study that is conducted at the University of Alberta; it proves that language is one of the main criteria on which the popularity of music relies on. As a result, people select the kind of music that feels familiar to their soul and thus is not a good measure to join them together. To conclude, although some people might believe that music has the ability to reduce the distance among several nations, I am still persuaded that it actually has more to do with the division among them. It has been discussed in this essay that languagee barriers and generation gap can have a strong influence on the preferences of music.
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music
is a
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good
source to unite
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people
, despite having diverse cultures and ages. I
strongly
disagree with this point of view for two main reasons;
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language
barriers and choice of
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music
based on generational disparity.

The
first
reason I tend to believe why it is not a likable way to connect
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people
from various ages is the difference in
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music
preferences of the
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old
and new generation depending upon their period of popular
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music
.
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Before
the modern instruments
were invented
, the earlier contemporaries were much more inclined towards the kind of
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music
that had meaningful lyrics.
Moreover
, it has
also
been observed
that
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people
with older traditions complain about the type of
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music
youngsters are
currently
addicted to.
For instance
, having carried out recent research, it is
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analysed
that 90% of the
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people
from the
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current
generation would choose to listen to rap
rather
than slow and classical
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music
.
Thus
,
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music
can not
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help
diminish this generational gap among
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people
.

Secondly
, not
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only
the culture
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also
the
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language
is an intangible barrier to interact with foreigners. Despite the fact that
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music
is not as
semantically
concrete as
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language
, every musical phrase creates a specific emotion that can
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only
be followed
by the
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people
with a similar mode of communication.
In addition
to that, the range of
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music
is quite wide
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so
it provides
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people
an option to select the
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music
they understand. Another example is the study that
is conducted
at the University of Alberta; it proves that
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language
is one of the main criteria on which the popularity of
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music
relies on.
As a result
,
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people
select the kind of
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music
that feels familiar to their soul and
thus
is not a
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good
measure to
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join
them together.

To conclude
, although
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some
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people
might believe that
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music
has the ability to
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reduce
the distance among several nations, I am
still
persuaded that it actually has more to do with the division among them. It has
been discussed
in this essay that
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languagee
barriers and generation gap can have a strong influence on the preferences of
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music
.
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A different language is a different vision of life.
Federico Fellini

IELTS essay You are working in an international company. You want to quit this job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, you should say: •Why you want to quit•When you want to leave•What you liked about the company. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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