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Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples. v.2

Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples. v. 2
English is a widely recognized international language, it is the language of international commerce and of academics. Due to this, local languages are often overlooked. This puts the local languages at risk of dying out. If there is no one interested in learning a language, then it is highly possible that the language in question might as well cease to exist someday. Learning English is important, but it cannot be prioritized over the mother language. Firstly, English is the official language in more than 50 countries, most of which are well-developed nations where one might be interested in settling down in the future. English speaking skills will come in handy in situations when you are trying to migrate abroad. It is also an asset for those who want to study overseas. For instance, the English-speaking countries such as the US, the UK and Canada are considered to be the best destinations for higher education. In addition, the job opportunities for an individual with better English skills are numerous. Having the ability to speak English fluently is extremely important in this age of globalisation as the nations can communicate more easily if their rulers were good English users. A good knowledge of English is also necessary for college students because most of the information required for them to study and to do paper works is written in English. The information available on the internet is mostly in English, so in order to make the best use of that information, users should have a good knowledge of the language. However, I think that the local languages should also be taught in order to preserve them for future generations. It is an important part of the country culture. There are many scriptures and books written in local languages that are full of knowledge and wisdom. For instance, there could be a book with information about traditional healing practices which is written in Sanskrit and there are a few people who are able to translate it. Including local languages in the school curriculum is one of the many ways to preserve them. For example, in Ireland learning Irish in school is optional and it’s not available in every school, and there are only a few native people who are able to speak in Irish. Which means that the Irish language is fading away, because English learning was prioritized over learning the local language. Also, the Government should provide incentives such as scholarships to students with local language skills. In conclusion, I believe that English is extremely necessary to succeed nowadays as it creates many job opportunities. Nevertheless, the mother tongue also needs to be given its due respect. I think that an equal effort should be made by individuals to learn both languages.
English is a
widely
recognized international
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language
, it is the
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language
of international commerce and of academics. Due to this,
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local
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languages
are
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often
overlooked. This puts the
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local
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languages
at
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risk
of dying out. If there is no one interested in
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learning
a
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language
, then it is
highly
possible that the
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language
in question might
as well
cease to exist someday.
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Learning
English is
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important
,
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but
it cannot
be prioritized
over the mother language.

Firstly
, English is the official
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language
in more than 50 countries, most of which are well-developed nations where one might
be interested
in settling down in the future.
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English speaking
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skills
will
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come
in handy in situations when you are trying to migrate abroad. It is
also
an asset for those who want to study overseas.
For instance
, the English-speaking countries such as the US, the UK and Canada
are considered
to be the best destinations for higher education.
In addition
, the job opportunities for an individual with better English
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skills
are numerous. Having the ability to speak English
fluently
is
extremely
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important
in this age of
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globalisation
as the nations can communicate more
easily
if their rulers were
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good
English users. A
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good
knowledge of English is
also
necessary for college students
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because
most of the
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information
required for them to study and to do paper works
is written
in English. The
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information
available on the internet is
mostly
in English,
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so
in order to
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make
the best
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use
of that
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information
, users should have a
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good
knowledge of the language.

However
, I
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think
that the
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local
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languages
should
also
be taught
in order to preserve them for future generations. It is an
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important
part of the country culture. There are
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many
scriptures and books written in
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local
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languages
that are full of knowledge and wisdom.
For instance
, there could be a book with
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information
about traditional healing practices which
is written
in Sanskrit and there are a few
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people
who are able to translate it. Including
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local
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languages
in the school curriculum is one of the
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many
ways to preserve them.
For example
, in Ireland
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learning
Irish in school is optional and it’s not available in every school, and there are
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only
a few native
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people
who are able to speak in Irish. Which means that the Irish
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language
is fading away,
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because
English
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learning
was prioritized
over
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learning
the
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local
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language
.
Also
, the
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Government
should provide incentives such as scholarships to students with
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local
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language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

In conclusion
, I believe that English is
extremely
necessary to succeed nowadays as it creates
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
job opportunities.
Nevertheless
, the mother tongue
also
needs to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
its due respect. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that an equal effort should
be made
by individuals to learn both
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languages
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
459 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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