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Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt Explain your choice using specific reasons and examples v.1

Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt Explain your choice using specific reasons and examples v. 1
It is believed by many that the government must preserve an archaic or language of small regions, however others have opposite meaning. My opinion in a full agreement with a first community. This essay explains view both of debaters from two sides: a legacy of ancestors and inevitable modification of a local language. First, saving almost a dying language means to keep a memory about our ancient time, about local of traditions and rituals. Moreover, archaeologists throughout the time by a digging find out new fragments antique languages that had lost among centuries that help better understanding culture of ancient people now, however, many are lost irrevocably. In addition, many countries still have two languages in everyday life. For instance, English intertwines archaic and modern tongue plus a few of the words from an archaic French especially it heard in church. Another example, the Ukrainian has an exciting mix ancient and newly of words; however, only in small villages. Consequently, we should preserve language for other people in the future. Secondly, time changes with technologies and our needs, so old words replaced by modern ones. Moreover, inasmuch as many families are accumulated knowledge and preserve ancient languages from a generation to a generation without the support of the government: citizens could preserve languages by themselves. In addition, many languages of small regions are combined tongues from different countries without any cultural weight, thereby spent money on it useless. Hence, probably better leave this process on people’s shoulders. In general, my opinion that saving the mother tongue case of families not the government that corresponds to the facts is presented previously which should convince even opposition in my view.
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is believed
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that the
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government
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must
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preserve
an archaic or
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language
of
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small
regions,
however
others have opposite meaning. My opinion in a full agreement with a
first
community. This essay
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explains
view both of debaters from two sides: a legacy of ancestors and inevitable modification of a local language.

First
, saving almost a dying
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language
means to
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keep
a memory about our
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ancient
time, about local of traditions and rituals.
Moreover
, archaeologists throughout the time by a digging find out new fragments antique
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languages
that had lost among centuries that
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help
better understanding culture of
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ancient
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people
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now
,
however
,
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many
are lost
irrevocably
.
In addition
,
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many
countries
still
have two
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languages
in everyday life.
For instance
, English intertwines archaic and modern tongue plus a few of the words from an archaic French
especially
it heard in church. Another example, the Ukrainian has an exciting mix
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ancient
and
newly
of words;
however
,
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only
in
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small
villages.
Consequently
, we should
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preserve
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language
for other
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people
in the future.

Secondly
, time
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changes
with technologies and our needs,
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so
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old
words replaced by modern ones.
Moreover
, inasmuch as
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many
families
are accumulated
knowledge and
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preserve
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ancient
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languages
from a generation to a generation without the support of the
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government
: citizens could
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preserve
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languages
by themselves.
In addition
,
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many
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languages
of
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small
regions
are combined
tongues from
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different
countries without any cultural weight, thereby spent money on it useless.
Hence
,
probably
better
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leave
this process on
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people
’s shoulders.

In general
, my opinion that saving the mother tongue case of families not the
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government
that corresponds to the facts
is presented
previously which should convince even opposition in my view.
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IELTS essay Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt Explain your choice using specific reasons and examples v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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