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Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explainthe reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v.1

Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explainthe reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 1
With the rapid growth of industrialization and construction industry in developing countries, quality of air and water has witnessed a significant reduction. In my opinion, using modern technologies and enforcing strict pollution control laws is important to improve the current situation. One of the major causes of water pollution is the sewage waste and water being dumped into regular water resources. Harmful bacteria and virus infects the whole water body and eventually becomes the reason for human health disorders. To curb this menace of pollution, modern technologies could be used for the treatment of sewage water in order to make it appropriate for domestic use. In fact, in developed countries like the U. S. A. , the advanced water treatment plants make the polluted water even fit for normal use in household activities. Furthermore, the government should also make strict laws instructing the industrialists to treat the wastewater before streaming it into open water bodies. The other major consequence of Industrialization is the air pollution. One of the main reasons for polluted air is the emission of harmful gases from industries while manufacturing goods. Compounding with this, the huge amount of debris from construction sites, makes the situation more gruesome. Pollution control boards should make sure that the companies obtain the environment clearance certificate regularly and operate within an admissible level of air pollution. Also, hefty penalties could be imposed on the rule violators to deter them from violating policies. Moreover, construction managers should obtain an approval letter from the environment department before commencing their projects. These steps will ensure that construction sites and industries do not generate harmful pollutants and take preventive measures for the reduction of air pollution. In conclusion, the growth of industrialization is essential for a developing economy and to reduce its impact on the deterioration of air and water, advanced technologies and stringent action plans and policies should be enforced.
With the rapid growth of industrialization and
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construction
industry in
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developing countries
, quality of
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air
and
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water
has witnessed a significant reduction. In my opinion, using modern technologies and enforcing strict
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pollution
control laws is
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important
to
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improve
the
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current
situation.

One of the major causes of
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water
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pollution
is the sewage waste and
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water
being dumped
into regular
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water
resources. Harmful bacteria and virus infects the whole
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water
body and
eventually
becomes the reason for human health disorders. To curb this menace of
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pollution
, modern technologies could be
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used
for the treatment of sewage
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water
in order to
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make
it appropriate for domestic
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use
. In fact, in
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developed countries
like the U. S. A.
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,
the advanced
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water
treatment plants
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make
the polluted
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water
even fit for normal
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use
in household activities.
Furthermore
, the
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government
should
also
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make
strict laws instructing the industrialists to treat the wastewater
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before
streaming it into open
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water
bodies.

The other major consequence of Industrialization is the
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air
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pollution
. One of the main reasons for polluted
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air
is the emission of harmful gases from industries while manufacturing
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goods
. Compounding with this, the huge amount of debris from
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construction
sites,
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makes
the situation more gruesome.
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Pollution
control boards should
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make
sure that the
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companies
obtain the environment clearance certificate
regularly
and operate within an admissible level of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
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pollution
.
Also
, hefty penalties could
be imposed
on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
violators to deter them from violating policies.
Moreover
,
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construction
managers should obtain an approval letter from the environment department
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
commencing their projects. These steps will ensure that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
sites and industries do not generate harmful pollutants and take preventive measures for the reduction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
pollution.

In conclusion
, the growth of industrialization is essential for a developing economy and to
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reduce
its impact on the deterioration of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
and
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water
, advanced technologies and stringent action plans and policies should
be enforced
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explainthe reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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