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1. Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explainthe reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v.1

1. Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explainthe reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 1
In the modern era, keep balance on learning between theoretical lesson and practical lesson has become a controversial issue. It is often said that too much attention are paid for learning root terms rather than soft skills at all tertiary educational institutes. However, I certainly agree that this happens up to secondary level, although it has less seen on university curriculum. The main reason for my view is that skills, which are an essential part of education, tend to be neglected when the learning of factual knowledge is over-emphasised. This has become a problem in the era of standardised testing, especially in the area of pre-16 compulsory education, where many governments around the world have started to introduce more examinations as a way of measuring student progress. Tests, by their very nature, tend to ask questions about the facts, and this has led to a reduction in emphasis on skills. For example, I used to teach in a school where hands-on scientific experiments were neglected in favour of learning scientific facts from textbooks, something which was entirely due to the importance placed on science examinations. However, I feel that the problem of balancing skills and knowledge teaching at the post-16 level is less of a concern. Many university courses, by their very nature, tend to emphasise theoretical, rather than practical, knowledge, and there are plenty of vocational courses available in less academic higher education institutions. For example, there is a local college in my town which has a curriculum rich in practical skills development, with courses available in everything from photography to bricklaying. The increasing emphasis on teaching factual information over skills-based approaches is certainly a problem in our schools. The huge pressure on teachers to secure good exam results means practical lessons and experiments are being dropped, and children’s backpacks are being increasingly weighed down by textbooks. If we are to provide our young people with skills suited for the 21st century, we will need to address this imbalance.
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keep
balance on
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between theoretical lesson and
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practical
lesson has become a controversial issue. It is
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often
said that too much attention
are paid
for
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learning
root terms
rather
than soft
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skills
at all tertiary educational institutes.
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, I
certainly
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agree
that this happens up to secondary level, although it has less
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seen
on university curriculum.

The main reason for my view is that
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skills
, which are an essential part of education, tend to
be neglected
when the
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learning
of factual knowledge is
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over-emphasised
. This has become a problem in the era of
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standardised
testing,
especially
in the area of pre-16 compulsory education, where
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many
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governments
around the world have
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started
to introduce more examinations as a way of measuring student progress.
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Tests
, by their
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very
nature, tend to ask questions about the facts, and this has led to a reduction in emphasis on
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skills
.
For example
, I
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used
to teach in a school where hands-on scientific experiments
were neglected
in
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favour
of
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learning
scientific facts from textbooks, something which was
entirely
due to the importance placed on science examinations.

However
, I feel that the problem of balancing
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skills
and knowledge teaching at the post-16 level is less of a concern.
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Many
university courses, by their
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very
nature, tend to
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emphasise
theoretical,
rather
than
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practical
, knowledge, and there are
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plenty
of vocational courses available in less academic higher education institutions.
For example
, there is a local college in my town which has a curriculum rich in
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practical
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skills
development, with courses available in everything from photography to bricklaying.

The increasing emphasis on teaching factual information over
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skills
-based approaches is
certainly
a problem in our schools. The huge pressure on teachers to secure
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good
exam results means
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practical
lessons and experiments are
being dropped
, and children’s backpacks are being
increasingly
weighed down by textbooks. If we are to provide our young
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people
with
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skills
suited for the 21st century, we will need to address this imbalance.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1. Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explainthe reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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