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1. Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explain the reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v.1

1. Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explain the reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 1
It is believed by the travel experts that people’s preferences for holidays are changing gradually. The travellers choose trips that include adventurous activities rather than laid-back trips. In my opinion, I do believe that this trend of choosing extreme adventurous holidays is emerging as people are curious to experience new things and challenge themselves. Nowadays, people plan their itineraries that involve thrilling activities as are interested in trying new things which Is not only out of their comfort zone, but also can boast about them in front of their friends and family and build a competent image and respect. Moreover, people are excited to do challenging and energizing things as this gives them the feeling of confidence and self-achievement. When they are able to do daring things on holidays makes them feel proud of themselves. Furthermore, people plan for active holidays to exercise, to stimulate the brain and to learn new physical activities away from the everyday pressures and commitments that might get in the way at home.  Outdoor activity not only results in a significantly greater improvement in mental wellbeing, feeling more connected to nature, cleaner air, and providing a significant vitamin-D boost, but also lead to improved mood, self-esteem and higher energy levels. To elucidate, holidays including activities such as hiking and bush walking helps them to gain more confidence and patience for uncertain and unfamiliar events which not only enhances their overall personality and lead to success in the future but also will improve their social and decision-making skills. To conclude, I vehemently agree that people prefer to organise their holidays including challenging and exciting events which takes them out of your familiar world as well as one can fearlessly perform with a great deal of fun, excitement and adrenaline rush.
It
is believed
by the travel experts that
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people’s
preferences for
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holidays
are changing
gradually
. The
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travellers
choose trips that include adventurous
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activities
rather
than laid-back trips. In my opinion, I do believe that this trend of choosing extreme adventurous
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holidays
is emerging as
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people
are curious to experience new things and challenge themselves.

Nowadays,
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people
plan their itineraries that involve thrilling
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activities
as
are interested
in trying new things which Is not
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only
out of their comfort zone,
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but
also
can boast about them in front of their friends and family and build a competent image and respect.
Moreover
,
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people
are excited
to
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do challenging
and energizing things as this gives them the feeling of confidence and self-achievement.
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When
they are able to do daring things on
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holidays
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makes
them feel proud of themselves.

Furthermore
,
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people
plan for active
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holidays
to exercise, to stimulate the brain and to learn new physical
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activities
away from the everyday pressures and commitments that might
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get
in the way at home.  Outdoor
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activity
not
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only
results in a
significantly
greater improvement in mental
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wellbeing
, feeling more connected to nature, cleaner air, and providing a significant vitamin-D boost,
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but
also
lead to
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improved
mood, self-esteem and higher energy levels. To elucidate,
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holidays
including
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activities
such as hiking and bush walking
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helps
them to gain more confidence and patience for uncertain and unfamiliar
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events
which not
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only
enhances their
overall
personality and lead to success in the future
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but
also
will
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improve
their social and decision-making
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skills
.

To conclude
, I
vehemently
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agree
that
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people
prefer to
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organise
their
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holidays
including challenging and exciting
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events
which takes them out of your familiar world
as well
as one can
fearlessly
perform with a great deal of fun, excitement and adrenaline rush.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1. Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. Please explain the reason and include specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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