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demand for food is increasing worldwide. what is the cause of this? what measure can the international community take to meet this demand? v.4

demand for food is increasing worldwide. what is the cause of this? what measure can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 4
These days there are enormous demands for food around the globe rather than before. Although there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of this trend, societies can take steps to mitigate potential problems. As the request for food is enhancing, several related problems can be anticipated. The main and foremost issue is that the number of humans is increasing worldwide, especially in undeveloped countries. This massive population needs a big source for feeding. Therefore, they have to search everywhere for nutrition. In addition to this, the number of people whose waste food is increased. In other words, a group of individuals, especially rich ones, think prodigality and food-wasting are not important and in some cases are the sign of wealthiness. Last but not least, climate changes and using agriculture lands in order to construction are seen more than before. This means that these human activities destroy the ecosystem and sources of feeding. There are several actions that governments could take to solve these problems described above firstly, a simple solution would be to increase the number of motivation programs to encourage people for the right usage of nutrition and avoiding of food-wasting. This means that the government can learn to people how to buy food based on their needs, and also giving the rest of their food to charities or sending to poor countries in order to help them. Another measure would be to counter population growth through educational courses for preventing born more kids in each family. These courses can help to keep the population in the range and help to not increase the number of individuals. Finally, governments could do not let companies destroy agriculture lands or jungles to build apartments, shopping centers or resort places. These acts can help in getting better weather and regrowing plants and animal species which are suitable for nutrition. In conclusion, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems of food requirements all around the world.
These days there are enormous demands for
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food
around the globe
rather
than
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before
. Although there will
undoubtedly
be
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some
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negative
consequences of this trend, societies can take steps to mitigate potential problems.

As the request for
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food
is enhancing, several related problems can
be anticipated
. The main and foremost issue is that the
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number
of humans is increasing worldwide,
especially
in undeveloped countries. This massive population needs a
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big
source for feeding.
Therefore
, they
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have to
search everywhere for nutrition.
In addition
to this, the
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number
of
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people
whose waste
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food
is increased
.
In other words
, a group of individuals,
especially
rich ones,
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think
prodigality and food-wasting are not
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important
and in
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some
cases are the
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sign
of wealthiness. Last
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but
not least, climate
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changes
and using agriculture lands in order to construction are
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seen
more than
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before
. This means that these human activities
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destroy
the ecosystem and sources of feeding.

There are several actions that
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governments
could take to solve these problems
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described
above
firstly
, a simple solution would be to increase the
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number
of motivation programs to encourage
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people
for the right usage of nutrition and avoiding of food-wasting. This means that the
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government
can learn to
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people
how to
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buy
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food
based on their needs, and
also
giving the rest of their
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food
to charities or sending to poor countries in order to
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help
them. Another measure would be to counter population growth through educational courses for preventing born more kids in each family. These courses can
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help
to
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keep
the population in the range and
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help
to not increase the
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number
of individuals.
Finally
,
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governments
could do not
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let
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companies
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destroy
agriculture lands or jungles to build apartments, shopping centers or resort places. These acts can
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help
in getting better weather and regrowing plants and animal species which are suitable for nutrition.

In conclusion
, various measures can
be taken
to tackle the problems of
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food
requirements all around the world.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay demand for food is increasing worldwide. what is the cause of this? what measure can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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