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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v.3

Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 3
In recent times, there has been a huge rise in the demand for food across countries. While some underdeveloped nations have reported loss of lives due to food starvation, some developed ones have concerns about food storage. Fortunately, however, there are solutions to deal with these problems. The major causes for the increase in food demand are population explosion and food wastage. In spite of the economy being low in countries like Africa, there has been an exponential increase in manpower. As a result of this food production cannot meet its demand, therefore, leading to serious issues like starvation. On the other hand, in countries where is economy is very sound there are issues pertaining to food wastage due to unavailability of advanced machinery for food storage. International food council can solve for the scarcity in economically backward countries by increasing the production through modern farming methods. India, for example, has made its food production rise northwards by 15% by adapting to advanced farming technologies. In developed countries where the wastage of food is high, initiatives should be taken to develop machinery that stores food for longer periods. To illustrate an example, recently the United States and Russia together developed an efficient process that allows food to be preserved for up to 20 days thereby bringing down the wastage by 20%. To conclude, there has been a drastic increase in food globally due to population explosion and food wastage. Thankfully, there are ways to solve it through technology and better farming techniques.
In recent times, there has been a huge rise in the demand for
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food
across
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countries
. While
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some
underdeveloped nations have reported loss of
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lives
due to
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food
starvation,
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some
developed ones have concerns about
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food
storage.
Fortunately
,
however
, there are solutions to deal with these problems.

The major causes for the increase in
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food
demand are population explosion and
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food
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wastage
.
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In spite of
the economy being low in
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countries
like Africa, there has been an exponential increase in manpower.
As a result
of this
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food
production cannot
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meet
its demand,
therefore
, leading to serious issues like starvation.
On the other hand
, in
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countries
where is economy is
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very
sound there are issues pertaining to
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food
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wastage
due to unavailability of advanced machinery for
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food
storage.

International
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food
council can solve for the scarcity in
economically
backward
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countries
by increasing the production through modern farming methods. India,
for example
, has made its
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food
production rise northwards by 15% by adapting to advanced farming technologies.

In developed
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countries
where the
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wastage
of
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food
is high, initiatives should
be taken
to develop machinery that stores
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food
for longer periods. To illustrate an example, recently the United States and Russia together developed an efficient process that
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allows
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food
to
be preserved
for up to 20 days thereby bringing down the
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wastage
by 20%.

To conclude
, there has been a drastic increase in
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food
globally due to population explosion and
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food
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wastage
.
Thankfully
, there are ways to solve it through technology and better farming techniques.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
252 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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