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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v.5

Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 5
It is argued that the request for the food production is inclining globally. This essay will suggest that the biggest problems of this phenomenon are not only an increase in the rate population, but also an inappropriate and then it will discuss the possible solutions that can be utilized by the international community to eradicate this problem. To embark on, the major reason of this problem is that the population is growing at an exponential rate because of which more and more land, which were once used for agricultural purposes are being used to build buildings as a result of which there is a scarcity of land, where food can be grown. So, there is a shortage of food in many parts of the world because the production of the food is less, while the populace, who need the food to eat is more. Moreover, In some countries, climate does not support the growth of vegetables, fruits, crops, et cetera. So, these nations are entirely dependent on others to get something to eat. Thus, it also leads to the increase in the demand for the food. On the other hand, these problems can curb out by the international community by taking some initiatives. Firstly, they should make people aware about the land, that is good for agriculture should not be used for building houses or any industries and it should be used only to produce food. Thus, with this person will try to save those land which are suitable for the growth of food. Secondly, they should try to encourage the people of those countries, where the production of food is good that rather than wasting food, they should import food to those regions, where inappropriate climate conditions do not support the growth of the food. To conclude, even though the problem of an increase in the food demand is on the rise due to an alarming rate of population growth and climate conditions, but by making people aware about the reasons behind these problems, these issues can be solved to a great extent.
It
is argued
that the request for the
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food
production is inclining globally. This essay will suggest that the biggest
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problems
of this phenomenon are not
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only
an increase in the rate population,
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but
also
an inappropriate and then it will discuss the possible solutions that can
be utilized
by the international community to eradicate this problem.

To embark on, the major reason of this
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problem
is that the population is growing at an exponential rate
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because
of which more and more
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land
, which were once
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used
for agricultural purposes are being
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used
to build buildings
as a result
of which there is a scarcity of
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land
, where
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food
can
be grown
.
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So
, there is a shortage of
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food
in
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many
parts of the world
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because
the production of the
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food
is less, while the populace, who need the
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food
to eat is more.
Moreover
, In
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some
countries, climate does not support the
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growth
of vegetables, fruits, crops,
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et cetera
.
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So
, these nations are
entirely
dependent on others to
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get
something to eat.
Thus
, it
also
leads to the increase in the demand for the food.

On the other hand
, these
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problems
can curb out by the international community by taking
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some
initiatives.
Firstly
, they should
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make
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people
aware about the
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land
,
that is
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good
for agriculture should not be
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used
for building
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houses
or any industries and it should be
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used
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only
to produce
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food
.
Thus
, with this person will try to save those
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land
which are suitable for the
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growth
of
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food
.
Secondly
, they should try to encourage the
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people
of those countries, where the production of
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food
is
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good
that
rather
than wasting
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food
, they should import
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food
to those regions, where inappropriate climate conditions do not support the
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growth
of the food.

To conclude
,
even though
the
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problem
of an increase in the
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food
demand is on the rise due to an alarming rate of population
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growth
and climate conditions,
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but
by making
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people
aware about the reasons behind these
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problems
, these issues can
be solved
to a great extent.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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