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Decisions often prove to be the crucial turning points of our lives, so a person should never make any decision alone. Do you agree with this statement? v.1

Decisions often prove to be the crucial turning points of our lives, so a person should never make any decision alone. v. 1
Nowadays, it cannot be ignored that most people who are on the point of making a big decision, usually consult their parents or teachers about their plans and ideas and this case is generally thought to be positive and beneficial. I hold no brief for the view above and in this essay, I am going to support my position with some evidence and examples. The first reason why I believe that no one should intervene in anyone's decisions, is because those who are helping to decide, are not going to be affected by both negative and positive consequences of the decisions anyway. For example, a man is thinking of starting a business and shares his start-up plans with some businessmen to see whether his projects are going to bear fruit or not. When the business is successful or about to face financial constraints, in either case, it tends not to bother those businessmen who gave their advice. The second reason why I support the idea of taking decisions alone is because, it tends to increase self-confidence, If the decision turns out to be wise. In other words, if the decision is yours, the result will be yours and this means that the decisions you make are capable of bringing positive outcomes, which will instantly give you a feeling of pride. Overall, I can say that taking decisions alone can benefit individuals in many ways and I believe, a decision-maker should be the only person who decides what to do after all advice and suggestions.
Nowadays, it cannot be
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people
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big
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decision
,
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consult their parents or teachers about their plans and
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ideas
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generally
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thought
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positive
and beneficial. I hold no brief for the view above and in this essay, I am going to support my position with
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some
evidence and examples.

The
first
reason why I believe that no one should intervene in anyone's
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decisions
, is
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because
those
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who
are helping to decide, are not going to be
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affected
by both
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negative
and
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positive
consequences of the
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decisions
anyway.
For example
, a
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man
is thinking of starting a business and shares his
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start
-up plans with
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some
businessmen to
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see
whether his projects are going to bear fruit or not. When the business is successful or about to face financial constraints, in either case, it tends not to bother those businessmen
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who
gave their advice.

The second reason why I support the
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idea
of taking
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decisions
alone is
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because
, it tends to increase self-confidence, If the
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decision
turns out to be wise.
In other words
, if the
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decision
is yours, the result will be yours and this means that the
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decisions
you
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make
are capable of bringing
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positive
outcomes, which will
instantly
give you a feeling of pride.

Overall
, I can say that taking
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decisions
alone can benefit individuals in
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many
ways and I believe, a decision-maker should be the
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only
person
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who
decides what to do
after all
advice and suggestions.
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IELTS essay Decisions often prove to be the crucial turning points of our lives, so a person should never make any decision alone. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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