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Cycling is heathier and environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v.1

Cycling is heathier and environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v. 1
Nowadays, cycling is less and less common although it helps us to keep in shape and is good for the environment. There are some reasons explain why it becomes so unpopular and solutions to increase cycling use. First and foremost, humans are lazier in today’s life. Therefore, they do not choose cycling which needs lots of physical strength to move. People today are affected by fast food, health problems and sitting a lot, so they are sedentary and mind riding bicycles. Second, a bicycle is not as convenient as other transportation, such as a car, bus or plane, because they have a great number of modern facilities inside them. For instance, cars protect us from bad weather, have the air-conditioners to keep us cool while bikes do not. Notwithstanding, we can make cycling more popular again to help the residents to be healthier and protect the environment. First, lowering the price of bicycles is a good solution. Currently, there are some shops are selling bicycles that people have to pay as much as pay for motorbikes. Consequently, the government should encourage the sellers to make them cheaper, so that the number of people buys and use the bicycles will raise. Another decision that needs considering is organizing a monthly cycling competition for the public. Whatever the competition is, it always attracts a lot of people, so there is possible that many people will join the race. Hence, if we keep doing that, people will gradually have a good habit of cycling every day. To conclude, people are too lazy to cycle and prefer more comfortable vehicles are the reason for this trend. However, we can solve the problem by making the price of bicycles inexpensive and give people a chance to take part in competitions regarding riding bicycles.
Nowadays,
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cycling
is less and less common although it
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helps
us to
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keep
in shape and is
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good
for the environment. There are
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some
reasons
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explain
why it becomes
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so
unpopular and solutions to increase
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cycling
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use
.

First
and foremost, humans are lazier in
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today
’s life.
Therefore
, they do not choose
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cycling
which needs lots of physical strength to
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move
.
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People
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today
are
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affected
by
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fast
food, health problems and sitting a lot,
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so
they are sedentary and mind riding
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bicycles
. Second, a
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bicycle
is not as convenient as other transportation, such as a car, bus or
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plane
,
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because
they have a great number of modern facilities inside them.
For instance
, cars protect us from
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bad
weather, have the air-conditioners to
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keep
us cool while bikes do not.

Notwithstanding, we can
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make
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cycling
more popular again to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the residents to be healthier and protect the environment.
First
, lowering the price of
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bicycles
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
solution.
Currently
, there are
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some
shops are selling
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bicycles
that
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people
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have to
pay as much as pay for motorbikes.
Consequently
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should encourage the sellers to
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make
them cheaper,
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so
that the number of
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people
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buys
and
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use
the
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bicycles
will raise. Another decision that needs considering is organizing a monthly
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cycling
competition for the public. Whatever the competition is, it always attracts
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a lot of
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people
,
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so
there is possible that
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many
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people
will
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join
the race.
Hence
, if we
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keep
doing that,
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people
will
gradually
have a
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good
habit of
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cycling
every day.

To conclude
,
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people
are too lazy to cycle and prefer more comfortable vehicles are the reason for this trend.
However
, we can solve the problem by making the price of
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bicycles
inexpensive and give
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people
a chance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in competitions regarding riding
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bicycles
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Cycling is heathier and environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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