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Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v.1

Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v. 1
The most eco-friendly transport is none other than cycle, which is also considered a healthier conveyance. Despite the fact, this is quite unpopular among people these days. Actually, there are several causes behind the tendency of the majority of the public, which need to be resolved by implementing the government's initiatives. To begin with, a number of individuals would like to commute in the most effective transports. This is because they do not want to wait long to reach their destination, and driving the fastest vehicle is one kind of preferable choice. For example, if people cycle in rush hours, it will take time most probably 30 minutes for a short distance, whereas they could reach far distant places within a few minutes, if they take motor cars, buses, et Cetra. Furthermore, people are not environmentally friendly, which leads them to think about themselves. That reason tends commuters to choose more faster transports than bicycles. On the contrary, as the population does not care about the ambiance, thinking that it would be polluted if individuals use transports that run on fuel, the government should come forward to solve this issue. Firstly authorities can impose levy on petrol engines, along with raising social awareness by organizing events and seminars in cities, which may make people conscious about the environment. Secondly, the bureaucrats of a country construct extra lane to commuters who travel by two wheels. For instance, in Amsterdam, there are at least five lanes for cycling in the streets so that office workers and students can reach their workplaces. Therefore, these kinds of methods should be applied in each terrain to encourage people for travelling by cycles. In conclusion, the most healthier means of transports is the cycle, even though people are indifferent to use this due to their unfriendly attitude towards the atmosphere and their demand for effective conveyance. However, the countermeasure can be- increasing the lane of cycling, soaring taxes on drivers, and making people conscious about the detrimental effect of not using bicycles.
The most eco-friendly
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transport
is none other than cycle, which is
also
considered a healthier conveyance. Despite the fact, this is quite unpopular among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
these days. Actually, there are several causes behind the tendency of the majority of the public, which need to
be resolved
by implementing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's initiatives.

To
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begin
with, a number of individuals would like to commute in the most effective
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transports
. This is
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because
they do not want to wait long to reach their destination, and driving the fastest vehicle is one kind of preferable choice.
For example
, if
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people
cycle in rush hours, it will take time most
probably
30 minutes for a short distance, whereas they could reach far distant places within a few minutes, if they take motor cars, buses,
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et
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Cetra
.
Furthermore
,
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people
are not
environmentally
friendly, which leads them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about themselves. That reason tends commuters to choose
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more faster
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transports
than bicycles.

On the contrary
, as the population does not care about the ambiance, thinking that it would
be polluted
if individuals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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transports
that run on fuel, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should
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come
forward to solve this issue.
Firstly
authorities can impose levy on petrol engines, along with raising social awareness by organizing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
and seminars in cities, which may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
conscious about the environment.
Secondly
, the bureaucrats of a country construct extra lane to commuters who travel by two wheels.
For instance
, in Amsterdam, there are at least five lanes for cycling in the streets
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that office workers and students can reach their workplaces.
Therefore
, these kinds of methods should
be applied
in each terrain to encourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
for travelling by cycles.

In conclusion
, the
Use only "healthier" (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
most healthier
means of
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transports
is the cycle,
even though
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people
are indifferent to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this due to their
unfriendly
attitude towards the atmosphere and their demand for effective conveyance.
However
, the countermeasure can be- increasing the lane of cycling, soaring taxes on drivers, and making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
conscious about the detrimental effect of not using bicycles.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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