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Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport Nevertheless cycling is getting less popular What are the reasons of this trend What can be done make cycling more popular v.2

Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport Nevertheless cycling is getting less popular What are the reasons of this trend What can be done make cycling more popular v. 2
The unpopularity of bicycles in numerous places has been brought into question though there is a little doubt about its being environmentally friendly. There are two main reasons for this trend and several feasible solutions could be implement to motivate the usage of bicycles. There are two underlying explanations why bicycles are not prevalent in many places. First, since it certainly takes considerable amount of time and effort to commute to work or anywhere else by bicycles, people would rather use their own cars or other means of transport, which means that they could save lots of time and energy. This is because it fails to benefit city dwellers of major metropolises when their pace of working life would eclipse the values of using bicycles to the environment. Secondly, due to the fact that cars are considered to be luxurious, many people opted to use cars instead of bikes so that they could attain more respect and admiration. Obviously, in a society that judges the personal status of the individual so much by their material worth, it is therefore difficult not to follow the trend by buying cars rather than really being concerned about the negative impact these vehicles would inflict on their surroundings. The government plays a vital role in encouraging the use of this environmentally friendly vehicle. First, if city councils town could provide more bicycles lanes throughout town and cities, residents will find it easier to change the habit and cycle on a regular basis. In fact, offering cycling lanes would offer greater safety to residents using their bikes. Second, by encouraging people to reduce their footprint and gas emissions through TVs or other media, authorities could increase the likelihood of people turning to cycling. In conclusion, both governments and residents should join their hand in increasing the utilization of bikes so that everyone will take action on global warming, resulting in a sustainable and dynamic development.
The unpopularity of
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bicycles
in numerous places has
been brought
into question though there is a
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little
doubt about its being
environmentally
friendly. There are two main reasons for this trend and several feasible solutions could be
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implement
to motivate the usage of bicycles.

There are two underlying explanations why
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bicycles
are not prevalent in
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many
places.
First
, since it
certainly
takes considerable amount of time and effort to commute to work or anywhere else by
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bicycles
,
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people
would
rather
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use
their
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own
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cars
or other means of transport, which means that they could save lots of time and energy. This is
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because
it fails to benefit city dwellers of major metropolises when their pace of working life would eclipse the values of using
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bicycles
to the environment.
Secondly
, due to the fact that
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cars
are considered
to be luxurious,
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many
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people
opted to
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use
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cars
instead
of bikes
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so
that they could attain more respect and admiration.
Obviously
, in a society that judges the personal status of the individual
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so
much by their material worth, it is
therefore
difficult not to follow the trend by buying
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cars
rather
than
really
being concerned
about the
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negative
impact these vehicles would inflict on their surroundings.

The
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government
plays a vital role in encouraging the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of this
environmentally
friendly vehicle.
First
, if city councils town could provide more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycles
lanes throughout town and cities, residents will find it easier to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the habit and cycle on a regular basis. In fact, offering cycling lanes would offer greater safety to residents using their bikes. Second, by encouraging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their footprint and gas emissions through TVs or other media, authorities could increase the likelihood of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
turning to cycling.

In conclusion
, both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
and residents should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
their hand in increasing the utilization of bikes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that everyone will take action on global warming, resulting in a sustainable and dynamic development.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport Nevertheless cycling is getting less popular What are the reasons of this trend What can be done make cycling more popular v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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