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Crime is a big problem in the world many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it To what extent do you agree or disagree Give your own opinion v.1

Crime is a big problem in the world many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it Give your own opinion v. 1
Many people have a tendency to buy those things which are not required or not that useful. This habit leads a person to take lots of loans from banks or from near and dear ones, because of which they get into debt and are not able to pay back the loans. This essay will discuss about the reasons for this behaviour in people and the solutions to prevent this. People get easily attracted from the expensive things which they see in malls or they see in the other's hand and find it very appealing. Humans always try to look or have things better from others. Due to these reasons, people become jealous and want to get those products easily, in a short period of time and without any hard work. For this reason they start taking loans from their financial associates or friends and family. By taking huge loans just to complete small wishes of life people get into huge debts. When they are unable to pay back the loans they suffer from stress, tension, depression and even commit suicide. This problem can be easily solved if people start becoming organized about their finances and know what things are important in their lives. If people start acknowledging what hard earned money and self respect is, they won't borrow money from others. To conclude, people should start saving money for the goods they want to buy. Instead of going into debt they should know what are their limitations therefore, till what limit can they buy goods. Moreover, people should know what things matters in life more is it the fancy things of malls or other precious relations, which generally get harmed due to such habits.
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people
have a tendency to
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buy
those things which are not required or not that useful. This habit leads a person to take lots of
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loans
from banks or from near and dear ones,
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because
of which they
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get
into debt and are not able to pay back the
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loans
. This essay will
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discuss about the
reasons for this
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behaviour
in
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people
and the solutions to
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prevent
this.

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People
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get
easily
attracted from the expensive things which they
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malls or
they
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see
in the other's hand and find it
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appealing. Humans always try to look or have things better from others. Due to these reasons,
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people
become jealous and want to
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get
those products
easily
, in a short period of time and without any
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hard
work.
For this reason
they
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start
taking
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loans
from their financial associates or friends and family.

By taking huge
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loans
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just
to complete
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small
wishes of life
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people
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get
into huge debts. When they are unable to pay back the
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loans
they suffer from
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stress
, tension, depression and even commit suicide. This problem can be
easily
solved if
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people
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start
becoming organized about their finances and know what things are
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important
in their
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lives
. If
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people
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start
acknowledging what
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hard earned
money and
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self respect
is, they won't borrow money from others.

To conclude
,
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people
should
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start
saving money for the
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goods
they want to
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buy
.
Instead
of going into debt they should know what are their limitations
therefore
, till what limit can they
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buy
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goods
.
Moreover
,
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people
should know what things
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matters
in life more is it the fancy things of malls or other precious relations, which
generally
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get
harmed due to such habits.
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IELTS essay Crime is a big problem in the world many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it Give your own opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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