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Countries should start using nuclear power as their main source of energy; fossil fuels (i. e. coal, oil and gas) are not going to last forever and nuclear power is the cheapest alternative. v.2

Countries should start using nuclear power as their main source of energy; fossil fuels (i. e. coal, oil and gas) are not going to last forever and nuclear power is the cheapest alternative. v. 2
At present many governments all over the world are putting forward a proposal for the new alternative source of energy production. The new solution for the energy generation consists of the replacement of the traditional energy production with nuclear power. Those that support the nuclear power introduction believe that as a more environmentally beneficial solution, it can cope with the pollution problems, while the opponents argue that there are numerous drawbacks that come with the new energy production. I am very doubtful whether the advantages are truly beneficial and I am of the opinion that drawbacks overweight the benefits. There are several reasons for the use of nuclear power. Firstly, due to its ability to emit far fewer greenhouse gases during the energy generation, it makes the nuclear power plants far more environmentally friendly and positive for the whole society. Also, some are of the opinion that the nuclear power plants have a much larger power-generating capacity which enables the production for bigger industrial areas, such as big cities and regions. However, this new energy progress surely brings much more drawbacks. First of all, because of its size as an infrastructural project, it brings a problem of high cost. Moreover, for the construction of such a large energy plants, subsidies are needed for the projecting and operation, as well as loan guarantees. Furthermore, there are great deals of high known risks that cannot be forgotten. For example, physical injuries, deaths and most importantly the high level of radiation produced from the nuclear waste and maintenance materials. Also, the research shows that the nuclear waste lasts from 200 to 500 thousand years, which negates the fact that is the pro-environmental solution. In conclusion, even if the nuclear power plants provide a vast of financial and energetic advantages, I truly believe that there are still a great deal of dangerous and contentious issues that come with it.
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governments
all over the world are putting forward a proposal for the
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new
alternative source of
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energy
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production
. The
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solution for the
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energy
generation consists of the replacement of the traditional
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energy
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production
with nuclear
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. Those that support the nuclear
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introduction believe that as a more
environmentally
beneficial solution, it can cope with the pollution problems, while the opponents argue that there are numerous drawbacks that
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come
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energy
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production
. I am
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doubtful whether the advantages are
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beneficial and
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There are several reasons for the
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use
of nuclear
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power
.
Firstly
, due to its ability to emit far fewer greenhouse gases during the
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energy
generation, it
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the nuclear
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power
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far more
environmentally
friendly and
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positive
for the whole society.
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,
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some
are of the opinion that the nuclear
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power
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plants
have a much larger power-generating capacity which enables the
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production
for bigger industrial areas, such as
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big
cities and regions.

However
, this
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progress
surely
brings much more drawbacks.
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,
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because
of its size as an infrastructural project, it brings a problem of high cost.
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, for the construction of such a large
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energy
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plants
, subsidies
are needed
for the projecting and operation,
as well
as loan guarantees.
Furthermore
, there are great deals of high known
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risks
that cannot
be forgotten
.
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, physical injuries, deaths and most
importantly
the high level of radiation produced from the nuclear waste and maintenance materials.
Also
, the research
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shows
that the nuclear waste lasts from 200 to 500 thousand years, which negates the fact
that is
the pro-environmental solution.

In conclusion
, even if the nuclear
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power
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plants
provide a vast of financial and energetic advantages, I
truly
believe that there are
still
a great deal of
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dangerous
and contentious issues that
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come
with it.
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IELTS essay Countries should start using nuclear power as their main source of energy; fossil fuels (i. e. coal, oil and gas) are not going to last forever and nuclear power is the cheapest alternative. v. 2

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315 words
6.0
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