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Some organizations impose the rule of wearing a uniform in the workplace. Do you think that employees in certain organizations should wear a uniform? What is your viewpoint on this issue? v.1

Some organizations impose the rule of wearing a uniform in the workplace. Do you think that employees in certain organizations should wear a uniform? What is your viewpoint on this issue? v. 1
Today´s world is the world of competitions and survival. If you want to succeed, you have to face and battle challenges and you have to show that you are undoubtedly the best. It also applies to your company and business. One of the methods to improve and depict a better image of your company is to unify the employees by asking them to wear uniforms. It is important that a company or an organisation shows a positive image to the public. In developed countries where there exists a free market and  people have the opportunity to choose between many, they surely will be attracted to the best ones. Subsequently, the more customers an organisation or company has, the more successful they will be. Let´s imagine that you visit a company where it´s employees wear different type of clothes and you can barely recognize who belongs there and who doesn´t. It will certainly affect your experiences and overall evaluation of that company. On the other side, if you for instance visit a car renting company and all the employees wear uniforms which represent that company, it gives you the feeling that you are dealing with proper the people and company. Furthermore, similar to schools, uniforms hides the differences (economic and social classes) between members and all will appear the same. This will make the "weaker" parts of the company or organisation feel confident and relax hence they will focus more on their job and the productivity will increase. Those who object the idea of introduction of uniforms may argue that by this the companies and organisations take the freedom of choice of clothes from the members. It is partly true, but of course, each company and the organisation has its own rules that must be obeyed. To conclude, I believe that the companies or organisations who regularly deal with customers directly and are in contact with people all the time can better their appearance and impact on customers by introducing uniforms to their employees.
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face and battle challenges and you
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the best. It
also
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applies to
your
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company
and business. One of the methods to
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improve
and depict a better image of your
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company
is to unify the
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employees
by asking them to wear uniforms.

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important
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company
or an
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organisation
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shows
a
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positive
image to the public. In
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developed countries
where there exists a free market and
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people
have the opportunity to choose between
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many
, they
surely
will
be attracted
to the best ones.
Subsequently
, the more customers an
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organisation
or
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has, the more successful they will be.
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Let
´s imagine that you visit a
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company
where
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employees
wear
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different
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. It will
certainly
affect your experiences and
overall
evaluation of that
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company
. On the other side, if you
for instance
visit a car renting
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company
and all the
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employees
wear
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uniforms
which represent that
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company
, it gives you the feeling that you are dealing with proper the
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people
and
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company
.

Furthermore
, similar to schools,
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uniforms
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hides
the differences (economic and social classes) between members and all will appear the same. This will
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make
the
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weaker
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parts of the
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company
or
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feel confident and relax
hence
they will focus more on their job and the productivity will increase.

Those
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who
object the
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idea
of introduction of
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uniforms
may argue that by this the
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companies
and
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organisations
take the freedom of choice of clothes from the members. It is partly true,
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of course
, each
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company
and the
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organisation
has its
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own
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rules
that
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must
be obeyed
.

To conclude
, I believe that the
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companies
or
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organisations
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who
regularly
deal with customers
directly
and are in contact with
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people
all the time can better their appearance and impact on customers by introducing
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uniforms
to their
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employees
.
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IELTS essay Some organizations impose the rule of wearing a uniform in the workplace. Do you think that employees in certain organizations should wear a uniform? What is your viewpoint on this issue? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
333 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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