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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.9

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 9
These days, traffic congestion has increased and become a critical problem for the nation as well as individuals. However, there are split opinions regarding how to mitigate this issue. Some people believe that authorities need to invest funds in developing training and subway lines to diminish traffic congestion while another group of thinkers argues that this problem could be solved by constructed to extend roads. However, both have their pros and cons. Therefore, before commenting on my decision, both views would be discussed. On the one hand, there are several reasons why people think that the government necessarily spend money on constructing train and underground ways lines to tackle traffic jam problems. The first and foremost one is that public transports save time and money, which gravitates the attraction of people toward these facilities. As a result, individuals prefer these alternative means of transport instead of using their vehicles, consequently, the bottlenecks of traffic cut down quickly. For instance, although people have their separate transportations, they choose public transports such as trains and subways, to reach fast and save money. Moreover, another reason is that underground transport ways no requirement to worry about the scarcity of land. Additionally, this also works as an alternative way of travelling. In this way, traffic congestion could be diminishing. On the other hand, there are clear reasons why the extension and construction of highways can alleviate the volume of traffic. To begin with, at present accessible paths are not enough to accommodate the number of vehicles on it. However, there are possibilities that a wider range of roads help to control traffic jam problems, by providing appropriate wider constructed roads. In other words, people have enough space on the roads to drive their vehicles, such as cars, bikes, trucks, and many more. Furthermore, this solution helps individuals to reach quickly at their destination without any disturbance or restriction. For example, different alternative branches of roads help to the public to select the best alternative way to reach their works by private vehicles if there is any crowd or traffic occurs. For these reasons, some people choose this way to reduce traffic congestion. In conclusion, there are debatable arguments for and against to mitigate traffic jam causes. However, I believe that constructing more and wider roads reduces traffic, but it is a temporary solution, so that the government should allocate funds to build train and subway lines instead of investing money on roads.
These days,
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traffic
congestion has increased and become a critical
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problem
for the nation
as well
as individuals.
However
, there
are split
opinions regarding how to mitigate this issue.
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Some
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people
believe that authorities need to invest funds in developing training and subway lines to diminish
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traffic
congestion while another group of thinkers argues that this
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problem
could
be solved
by constructed to extend
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roads
.
However
, both have their pros and cons.
Therefore
,
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before
commenting on my decision, both views would
be discussed
.

On the one hand, there are several
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reasons
why
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people
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think
that the
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government
necessarily
spend
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money
on constructing train and underground
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ways
lines to tackle
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traffic
jam
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problems
. The
first
and foremost one is that public
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transports
save time and
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money
, which gravitates the attraction of
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people
toward these facilities.
As a result
, individuals prefer these
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alternative
means of
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transport
instead
of using their
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vehicles
,
consequently
, the bottlenecks of
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traffic
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cut
down
quickly
.
For instance
, although
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people
have their separate transportations, they choose public
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transports
such as trains and subways, to reach
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fast
and save
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money
.
Moreover
, another
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reason
is that underground
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transport
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ways
no requirement to worry about the scarcity of land.
Additionally
, this
also
works as an
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alternative
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way
of travelling. In this
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way
,
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traffic
congestion could be diminishing.

On the other hand
, there are
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clear
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reasons
why the extension and construction of highways can alleviate the volume of
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traffic
. To
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begin
with, at present accessible paths are not
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enough
to accommodate the number of
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vehicles
on it.
However
, there are possibilities that a wider range of
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roads
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help
to control
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traffic
jam
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problems
, by providing appropriate wider constructed
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roads
.
In other words
,
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people
have
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enough
space on the
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roads
to drive their
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vehicles
, such as cars, bikes, trucks, and
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many
more.
Furthermore
, this solution
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helps
individuals to reach
quickly
at their destination without any disturbance or restriction.
For example
,
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different
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alternative
branches of
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roads
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help
to the public to select the best
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alternative
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way
to reach their works by private
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vehicles
if there is any crowd or
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traffic
occurs. For these
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reasons
,
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some
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people
choose this
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way
to
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reduce
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traffic
congestion.

In conclusion
, there are debatable arguments for and against to mitigate
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traffic
jam causes.
However
, I believe that constructing more and wider
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roads
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
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traffic
,
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but
it is a temporary solution,
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so
that the
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government
should allocate funds to build train and subway lines
instead
of investing
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money
on
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roads
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
408 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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