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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989 v.1

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989 v. 1
Everyone is born with some instincts which they carry throughout their life. Many studies have implied that these natural characteristics have an influence on one’s personal traits than any other experience they might have in their life. This essay will shed some light upon the things that influence one’s personality most. Although the natural instincts with which a human is born has a significant effect, it’s not all that makes up his character. It’s a combination of such natural features and other major experiences throughout life that really define a person. A child is most affected by the acts of its parents, it may not have been born with anger and frustration, but it might develop these characteristics by watching its parents fight all the time. To continue with this, this developed feature of short-temperedness may fade by noticing the kind acts of someone, perhaps its spouse, towards it. However, the inbuilt features of a person may be so strong that all the other major experiences might not matter. For instance, a human being who is naturally very lively and carefree may not be affected by the cruelty of the world. But in most cases it is the other way around, experiences like, death of a close friend, or losing a job, have an impact on personality. In conclusion, it can be said that, even though the inbuilt characteristics have a valuable impact on personal traits of someone, the effect of other major experiences outweigh them. Also, some of these experiences might enhance the natural instincts more.
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instincts which they carry throughout their life.
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studies have implied that these
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natural
characteristics have an influence on one’s personal traits than any
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other
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experience
they
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might
have in their life. This essay will shed
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some
light upon the things that influence one’s personality most.

Although the
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natural
instincts with which a human
is born
has a significant effect, it’s not all that
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makes
up his character. It’s a combination of such
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natural
features and
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other
major
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experiences
throughout life that
really
define a person. A child is most
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affected
by the acts of its parents, it may not have
been born
with anger and frustration,
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but
it
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might
develop these characteristics by watching its parents fight all the time. To continue with this, this developed feature of
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short-temperedness
may fade by noticing the kind acts of someone, perhaps its spouse, towards it.

However
, the inbuilt features of a person may be
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so
strong that all the
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other
major
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experiences
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might
not matter.
For instance
, a human being who is
naturally
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very
lively and carefree may not be
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affected
by the cruelty of the world.
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But
in most cases
it is the
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other
way around,
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experiences
like, death of a close friend, or losing a job, have an impact on personality.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that,
even though
the inbuilt characteristics have a valuable impact on personal traits of someone, the effect of
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other
major
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experiences
outweigh them.
Also
,
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some
of these
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experiences
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might
enhance the
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natural
instincts more.
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IELTS essay The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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