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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v.7

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 7
Nowadays, due to the globalization, people can buy many similar products around the world. Personally, I believe that there are both pros and cons about this development. First, this development could be beneficial and convenient for those people who travel a lot. This means that they can buy the same goods in many different countries during their journey without worrying about if they forgot to bring anything with them or not. For instance, people who travel with overweight luggage can buy a new one in any gift shop in any country's airport at any time, so they do not have to concern about the weight of their baggages. On the other hand, this might cause a huge impact to the local people in their own countries. Those local shops may have to compete with the globalization products, in order to earn more money. Furthermore, this could lead the decline of the diversity of goods. If we can buy the same products around the world, the traditional products of the country may replace by those international products. For example, there are many traditional restaurants have been substituted by international fast food restaurants, such as McDonalds and Fridays. In conclusion, there are two sides of one coin, as we benefit from the convenience of globalization, we should also concern about the local objects in our own country.
Nowadays, due to the globalization,
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people
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buy
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many
similar
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products
around the world.
Personally
, I believe that there are both pros and cons about this development.

First
, this development could be beneficial and convenient for those
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people
who travel a lot. This means that they can
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buy
the same
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goods
in
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many
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different
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countries
during their journey without worrying about if they forgot to bring anything with them or not.
For instance
,
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people
who travel with overweight luggage can
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buy
a new one in any gift shop in any country's airport at any time,
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so
they do not
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have to
concern about the weight of their
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baggages
.

On the other hand
, this might cause a huge impact to the local
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people
in their
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own
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countries
. Those local shops may
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have to
compete with the globalization
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products
, in order to earn more money.
Furthermore
, this could lead the decline of the diversity of
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goods
. If we can
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buy
the same
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products
around the world, the traditional
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products
of the
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country
may replace by those international
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products
.
For example
, there are
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many
traditional restaurants have
been substituted
by international
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fast
food restaurants, such as
Did you mean the fast food chain "McDonald's" (always spelled with a possessive apostrophe)?
McDonalds
and Fridays.

In conclusion
, there are two sides of one coin, as we benefit from the convenience of globalization, we should
also
concern about the local objects in our
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own
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country
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
225 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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