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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.26

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 26
Due to the globalization, many parts of the world have been revolutionized. This will lead to the people from various nations are using the same products in their routine life. As per my opinion, this will affect in an irrefutable manner which represents the unity between the people. The essay will discuss above notion with arguments in below paragraphs. To begin with, the predominant reason is that most of the people over the world are now educated. This will make them to select the product which would be beneficial for their health. Even having the enough money to buy it. Moreover, the availability of technology will introduce the people about the new items in the market. Although, any item which will be published in the foreign country for the first time, many people in India are using it in a few days due to fast growing world. For example, research conducted shows that most of the young people were wearing the shoes from Nike, as it provides the comfort and create status in their friend circle. Furthermore, in the contemporary world, people are travelling to a various part of the universe. This will be expanded only due to the availability of products from their home country. At last, people who went to the foreign country will find the similar nature, people by having a same choice of some of the items. This will help them to expand their social relation in the unknown country. For instance, most of the children make their friends by having a similar choice of food and who wear similar brand clothes. In conclusion, there are many positive points of this diversity which help to grow the individual’s ability. Even one should ready to migrate and expand their relation in the unknown place having similarity of daily products.
Due to the globalization,
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many
parts of the
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world
have
been revolutionized
. This will lead to the
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people
from various nations are using the same
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products
in their routine life. As per my opinion, this will affect
Consider replacing "in an irrefutable manner" with the adverb for "irrefutable"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an irrefutable manner
which represents the unity between the
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people
. The essay will discuss above notion with arguments in below paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the predominant reason is that most of the
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people
over the
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world
are
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now
educated. This will
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make
them to select the
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product
which would be beneficial for their health. Even
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having
the
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enough
money to
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buy
it.
Moreover
, the availability of technology will introduce the
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people
about the new items in the market. Although, any item which will
be published
in the foreign
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country
for the
first
time,
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many
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people
in India are using it in a few days due to
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fast
growing
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world
.
For example
, research conducted
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shows
that most of the young
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people
were wearing the shoes from Nike, as it provides the comfort and create status in their friend circle.

Furthermore
, in the contemporary
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world
,
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people
are travelling to a various part of the universe. This will
be expanded
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only
due to the availability of
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products
from their home
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country
. At last,
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people
who went to the foreign
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country
will find the similar nature,
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people
by
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having
a same choice of
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some of the
items. This will
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help
them to expand their social relation in the unknown
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country
.
For instance
, most of the children
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make
their friends by
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having
a similar choice of food and who wear similar brand clothes.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
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positive
points of this diversity which
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help
to grow the individual’s ability. Even one should ready to migrate and expand their relation in the unknown place
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having
similarity of daily
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products
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 9.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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