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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.14

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 14
Recently, there has been a boom in the world’s production of every item thanks to advancement in technology, making purchasers easily accessible to a wide range of products which are considered identical in many ways, thus, nations now are having more similarities in this respect. I personally find this tendency is a mutual benefit to both consumers themselves and the globe’s economy. In the first place, the growth in number of international brands offered within the border of any given countries is advantageous for domestic consumers. Products made overseas are usually of high quality, which are imported into a country for the sake of its citizens. Therefore, national customers do not have to afford a flying ticket to a foreign country to buy highly-skilful manufactured items. Instead, they could purchase these high-end products domestically, saving for them a great deal of money as well as making them enjoy the goods that can meet their expectations. For example, Japanese bicycle producers have made their name for manufacturing durable bikes of high quality and the worldwide spread to every corner of the world of this brand has significantly enhanced the cycling enjoyment and satisfaction of global cyclists. In addition to the first argument, the international expansion of identical products are also favourable for the global economic development. To be more exact, by consistently importing foreign goods as well as exporting internally-made ones, introducing domestically existing products in a different country, the overall economic levels among countries would be boosted thanks to international trading. Furthermore, by encountering and using these items frequently, customers will probably gain a deeper insight of the quality of the brand that manufacturers want to deliver to them. Hence, if the quality is able to reach the customers’ demand, the brand will be appealing and captivating more than ever, leading to a noticeable rise in sales volumes. In conclusion, the trend that the same items are readily available worldwide is beneficial for both international consumers as well as economy as for the reasons explained above.
Recently, there has been a boom in the world’s production of every
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item
thanks to advancement in technology, making purchasers
easily
accessible to a wide range of
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products
which
are considered
identical in
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many
ways,
thus
, nations
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now
are having more similarities in this respect. I
personally
find this tendency is a mutual benefit to both consumers themselves and the globe’s economy.

In the
first
place, the growth in number of
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international
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brands
offered within the border of any
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given
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countries
is advantageous for domestic consumers.
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Products
made overseas are
usually
of high
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quality
, which
are imported
into a
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country
for the sake of its citizens.
Therefore
, national customers do not
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have to
afford a flying ticket to a foreign
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country
to
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buy
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highly-skilful
manufactured
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items
.
Instead
, they could
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purchase
these high-
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end
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products
domestically
, saving for them a great deal of money
as well
as making them enjoy the
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goods
that can
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meet
their expectations.
For example
, Japanese bicycle producers have made their name for manufacturing durable bikes of high
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quality
and the worldwide spread to every corner of the world of this
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brand
has
significantly
enhanced the cycling enjoyment and satisfaction of global cyclists.

In addition
to the
first
argument, the
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international
expansion of identical
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products
are
also
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favourable
for the global economic development. To be more exact, by
consistently
importing foreign
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goods
as well
as exporting
internally
-made ones, introducing
domestically
existing
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products
in a
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different
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country
, the
overall
economic levels among
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countries
would
be boosted
thanks to
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international
trading.
Furthermore
, by encountering and using these
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items
frequently
, customers will
probably
gain a deeper insight of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of the
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brand
that manufacturers want to deliver to them.
Hence
, if the
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quality
is able to reach the customers’ demand, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
brand
will be appealing and captivating more than ever, leading to a noticeable rise in sales volumes.

In conclusion
, the trend that the same
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items
are
readily
available worldwide is beneficial for both
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international
consumers
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as well as
economy as for the reasons
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explained
above.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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