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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.49

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 49
There remains a controversy whether it is dependent on students’ decisions to choose what they want to learn. However, others assert that students are obligatory to learn several specific subjects which are considered practical. These two ideas will be discussed as follows and I would like to present my own point of view. In the first place, there can be a noticeable reason why university students should be free when it comes to choosing the subjects to learn that they find appealing. It is because that students who study the subjects about which they are passionate, usually significantly outperform those who are coerced into doing so in terms of academic achievement. This can be explained by the right motivations which students acquire for themselves when working in the areas of their interest. Thanks to these impulses, students can create an appropriate studying method for themselves, which is one of the significant elements forming their success. Subsequently, being exceptionally good in a particular field will not only provide students stable incomes later on but also allow them the opportunity to contribute their knowledge to the world. On the other hand, a great number of people favour the idea that students are required to study the subjects that are thought to be realistic in their adulthood such as technology. This is comprehensible as many adults have thought that only by studying these subjects can students actually contribute their value to society because of their wide applications in reality. Therefore, it would be pointless to learn other subjects which can play a crucial role in constituting the fundamental foundation for students with regard to mindsets, manners or behaviours. However, this action usually causes demotivation among students due to the lack of interests. To conclude, I am in all agreement with the former statement that students are under no obligation to choose what to study in university. Being forced to learn a fixed set of subjects would by no means encourage them to excel in any fields. Students should be their own decision makers in order to obtain a higher academic achievement.
There remains a controversy whether it is dependent on
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students’
decisions to choose what they want to
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learn
.
However
, others assert that
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students
are obligatory to
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learn
several specific
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subjects
which
are considered
practical. These two
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ideas
will
be discussed
as follows and I would like to present my
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own
point of view.

In the
first
place, there can be a noticeable reason why university
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students
should be free when it
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comes
to choosing the
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subjects
to
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learn
that they find appealing. It is
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because
that
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students
who study the
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subjects
about which they are passionate,
usually
significantly
outperform those who
are coerced
into doing
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so
in terms of academic achievement. This can be
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explained
by the right motivations which
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students
acquire for themselves when working in the areas of their interest. Thanks to these impulses,
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students
can create an appropriate studying method for themselves, which is one of the significant elements forming their success.
Subsequently
, being
exceptionally
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good
in a particular field will not
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only
provide
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students
stable incomes later on
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but
also
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allow
them the opportunity to contribute their knowledge to the world.

On the other hand
, a great number of
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people
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favour
the
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idea
that
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students
are required
to study the
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subjects
that are
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thought
to be realistic in their adulthood such as technology. This is comprehensible as
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many
adults have
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thought
that
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only
by studying these
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subjects
can
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students
actually contribute their value to society
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because
of their wide applications in reality.
Therefore
, it would be pointless to
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learn
other
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subjects
which can play a crucial role in constituting the fundamental foundation for
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students
with regard to mindsets, manners or
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behaviours
.
However
, this action
usually
causes
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demotivation
among
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students
due to the lack of interests.

To conclude
, I am in all agreement with the former statement that
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students
are under no obligation to choose what to study in university.
Being forced
to
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learn
a
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fixed
set of
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subjects
would by no means encourage them to excel in any fields.
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Students
should be their
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own
decision makers in order to obtain a higher academic achievement.
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 49

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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