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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world. Do you think the is a positive or negative development? v.1

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world. Do you think the is a positive or negative development? v. 1
Recently, the line demarcating the differences among countries has been noticed to grow thinner with the easy access to same products worldwide. In my opinion, this trend could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure. Naturally, demand is the force that drives production, it is the desire of every manufacturer. The ability to make products and services available across the world will surely increase the profits of every producer. Furthermore, increase in the demand with convenience of supply to people of different countries will create job opportunities along the chain of supply. For instance, there has been the creation of several courier services to this effect. Lastly, making product delivery easier gives people opportunities to meet their wants irrespective of their location across the world. There are, however, some negative impacts associated with this trend. Firstly, movement of products from countries to countries may depress the economic growth of the receiving countries in terms of manufacturing. Some countries import products such as pencils and toothpicks. Secondly, easy purchase of foreign products may influence the cultural and religious beliefs of some of these countries. The exposure may result in deviant attitude towards local practices among the people. There are still some problems of westernisation in some countries today. Finally, some products are not found to be cost effective, this is because of the cost of shipping which sometimes be more than the price of the product itself. In summary, smooth delivery of products is good for the world economy at large, but should not be allowed to frustrate the efforts of the developing countries in doing things on their own.
Recently, the line demarcating the differences among
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countries
has
been noticed
to grow thinner with the easy access to same
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products
worldwide. In my opinion, this trend could have both
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positive
and
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negative
consequences in equal measure.

Naturally
, demand is the force that drives production, it is the desire of every manufacturer. The ability to
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make
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products
and services available across the world will
surely
increase the profits of every producer.
Furthermore
, increase in the demand with convenience of supply to
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people
of
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different
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countries
will create job opportunities along the chain of supply.
For instance
, there has been the creation of several courier services to this effect.
Lastly
, making
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product
delivery easier gives
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people
opportunities to
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meet
their wants irrespective of their location across the world.

There are,
however
,
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some
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negative
impacts associated with this trend.
Firstly
, movement of
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products
from
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countries
to
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countries
may depress the economic growth of the receiving
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countries
in terms of manufacturing.
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Some
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countries
import
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products
such as pencils and toothpicks.
Secondly
, easy
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purchase
of foreign
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products
may influence the cultural and religious beliefs of
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some
of these
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countries
. The exposure may result in deviant attitude towards local practices among the
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people
. There are
still
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some
problems of
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westernisation
in
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countries
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today
.
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,
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products
are not found to
be cost
effective, this is
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because
of the cost of shipping which
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sometimes
be more than the price of the
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product
itself.

In summary, smooth delivery of
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products
is
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good
for the world economy at large,
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but
should not be
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allowed
to frustrate the efforts of the developing
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countries
in doing things on their
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own
.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world. Do you think the is a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
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