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Corporal punishment is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Corporal punishment is the best form of discipline. v. 2
Some people believe that smacking or spanking is the most effective disciplinary technique for behavior management with children. I completely disagree with this view. One the one hand, the use of force is barbaric and there are many other forms of discipline should instead be used to teach good behavior. In fact, a range of alternatives such as verbal correction, grounding, withholding of pocket-money is justified to be practical and helpful in behavior management. For instance, the principle of grounding which bans children from getting out of the place of residence for pleasure will effectively prevent them from behaving badly afterward because the fear of not being able to play with friends is bigger than that of being smacked or spanked. On the other hand, parental use of physical punishment suggests that violence can be acceptable. This may lead to children’s criminal offenses in their future because they believe that violence is an effective weapon to make other people act as their will and unflinchingly inflict force on them until the victims show signs of obedience. In fact, there is a link between criminals, bullies or behavior disorders and being beaten by their parents as part of their upbringing. As a result, corporal punishment would be counter-productive and only convey the harmful message of the use of violence to achieve someone’s aim. In conclusion, physical chastisement is not an effective form of child education and even counterproductive. There are many discipline technique available and should be used according to the degree of the child’s disobedience.
Some
people
believe that smacking or spanking is the most effective disciplinary technique for
behavior
management with children. I completely disagree with this view.

One
the one hand, the
use
of force is barbaric and there are
many
other forms of discipline should
instead
be
used
to teach
good
behavior
. In fact, a range of alternatives such as verbal correction, grounding, withholding of pocket-money
is justified
to be practical and helpful in
behavior
management.
For instance
, the principle of grounding which bans children from getting out of the place of residence for pleasure will
effectively
prevent
them from behaving
badly
afterward
because
the fear of not being able to play with friends is bigger than that of
being smacked
or spanked.

On the other hand
, parental
use
of physical punishment suggests that violence can be acceptable. This may lead to children’s criminal offenses in their future
because
they believe that violence is an effective weapon to
make
other
people
act as their will and
unflinchingly
inflict force on them until the victims
show
signs of obedience. In fact, there is a link between criminals, bullies or
behavior
disorders and
being beaten
by their parents as part of their upbringing.
As a result
, corporal punishment would be counter-productive and
only
convey the harmful message of the
use
of violence to achieve someone’s aim.

In conclusion
, physical chastisement is not an effective form of child education and even counterproductive. There are
many
discipline technique available and should be
used
according to the degree of the child’s disobedience.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Corporal punishment is the best form of discipline. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
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