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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumes influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them? v.3

Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. What measures can be taken to protect them? v. 3
Advertising is the heart of the trade. To survive in this competitive market today, every product needs to be advertised. Because of this, consumers are bombarded with rising ads from these companies, and it has a remarkable impact on their daily life. In my opinion, these adverts have both positive and negative effects on buyers, and some steps should be taken to protect from the drawbacks of adverts. There are many advantages of advertisements on people's mind. Firstly, the ads give valuable and crystal clear information about new products. So, people can purchase those items based on their requirements, budget and choice. Secondly, some ads spread awareness regarding social issues, which help the youngster and children to educate themselves and become mature. Finally, advertisements are the best medium to update ourselves in this contemporary world and this leads to an increase in job opportunities, ultimately surged in the employment rate. However, the ads have their demerits, too. The vulnerable target for the adverts is children because they lack the knowledge and not mature enough to make wise decisions. On account of this, children are easily swayed and pester their parents to buy those items. Moreover, covert advertisements and celebrity endorsement are just alternative ways to tempt people and manipulate them to purchase unnecessary things. Therefore, to prevent this manipulation, some solutions ought to be proposed to promote. The first solution is those adverts should be banned, which contains liquor or any dangerous stunts that are hazardous for the individuals. Also, the government bodies ought to encourage the consumer awareness program. Besides, we must research from different resources before buying any products rather than just influenced by our favourite celebrity or role models. To conclude from the arguments mentioned, we can prevent a consumer from being compelled by some demerits of ads by implementing remedies and also improve our lifestyle and stay up to date in this modern world by utilizing the merits of ads.
Advertising is the heart of the trade. To survive in this competitive market
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today
, every product needs to
be advertised
.
Because of this
, consumers
are bombarded
with rising ads from these
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companies
, and it has a remarkable impact on their daily life. In my opinion, these adverts have both
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positive
and
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negative
effects on buyers, and
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some
steps should
be taken
to protect from the drawbacks of adverts.

There are
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many
advantages of advertisements on
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people
's mind.
Firstly
, the ads give valuable and crystal
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clear
information about new products.
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So
,
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people
can
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purchase
those items based on their requirements, budget and choice.
Secondly
,
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some
ads spread awareness regarding social issues, which
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help
the youngster and children to educate themselves and become mature.
Finally
, advertisements are the best medium to update ourselves in this contemporary world and this leads to an increase in job opportunities,
ultimately
surged in the employment rate.

However
, the ads have their demerits, too. The vulnerable target for the adverts is children
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because
they lack the knowledge and not mature
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enough
to
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make
wise decisions. On account of this, children are
easily
swayed and pester their parents to
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buy
those items.
Moreover
, covert advertisements and celebrity endorsement are
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just
alternative ways to tempt
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and manipulate them to
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purchase
unnecessary things.

Therefore
, to
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prevent
this manipulation,
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some
solutions ought to
be proposed
to promote. The
first
solution is those adverts should
be banned
, which contains liquor or any
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
stunts that are hazardous for the individuals.
Also
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
bodies ought to encourage the consumer awareness program.
Besides
, we
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must
research from
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different
resources
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before
buying any products
rather
than
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just
influenced by our
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favourite
celebrity or role models.

To conclude
from the arguments mentioned, we can
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prevent
a consumer from
being compelled
by
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some
demerits of ads by implementing remedies and
also
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improve
our lifestyle and stay up to date in this modern world by utilizing the merits of ads.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
One should not aim at being possible to understand but at being impossible to misunderstand.
Marcus Fabius Quintilian

IELTS essay Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. What measures can be taken to protect them? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
324 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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