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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them? v.4

Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. What measures can be taken to protect them? v. 4
Companies are spending more on marketing than ever before. With increasing competition, businesses are promoting their products aggressively. Therefore, I believe customers are getting influenced immensely. This essay will discuss the consumers' response by these advertisements and some solutions. Firstly, there is a lot of false information that companies convey about their products. This leads to people believing everything they watch on television or online. The main reason is the cut-throat competition, and to survive they have to sell their products, no matter what. Agencies usually hire already popular celebrities, to gain everybody's trust. For instance, to promote health supplements, athletes are chosen, the customer starts connecting the healthy lifestyle and fitness of that sportsmen with the supplement. One possible solution to the problem can be, celebrities should research all about the brand before endorsing. It will ensure the audience gets the right product. Secondly, with marketing we end up having more items than we need. Misleading promotions are the main reason behind it. For example, if we ever see a luxury brand commercial, they always focus on rich people's lifestyle. This is because, they want to connect their brand with luxury, which has a little to do with the actual product. I feel, government should monetize these commercials, they should check the product's authenticity first, and any type of online marketing should also be checked. To conclude, companies will always find loopholes in the system, to exploit it. Unless the government impose strict rules, the problem will only escalate. Also, It should be the responsibility of citizens, to check what to trust because the false information will be there.
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Companies
are spending more on marketing than ever
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before
. With increasing competition, businesses are promoting their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
aggressively
.
Therefore
, I believe customers are getting influenced
immensely
. This essay will discuss the consumers' response by these advertisements and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
solutions.

Firstly
, there is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
false information that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
convey about their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
. This leads to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believing everything they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
on television or online. The main reason is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
-throat competition, and to survive they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
sell their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, no matter what. Agencies
usually
hire already popular celebrities, to gain everybody's trust.
For instance
, to promote health supplements, athletes
are chosen
, the customer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
connecting the healthy lifestyle and fitness of that sportsmen with the supplement. One possible solution to the problem can be, celebrities should research all about the brand
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
endorsing. It will ensure the audience
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
the right product.

Secondly
, with marketing we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up having more items than we need. Misleading promotions are the main reason behind it.
For example
, if we ever
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
a luxury brand commercial, they always focus on rich
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's lifestyle. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
, they want to connect their brand with luxury, which has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
to do with the actual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
. I feel,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should monetize these commercials, they should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
the product's authenticity
first
, and any type of online marketing should
also
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
.

To conclude
,
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companies
will always find loopholes in the system, to exploit it. Unless the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
impose strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
, the problem will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
escalate.
Also
, It should be the responsibility of citizens, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
what to trust
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the false information will be there.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. What measures can be taken to protect them? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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