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Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their works from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. v.2

Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their works from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. v. 2
There are many high-end computers and modems available in the market using which we can set up the same type of environment as office and can have a better privilege to work from home. I do not think that's a good practice to work for office staying at home. It affects the work in various mean and spoils work culture of an office. Many companies follow a dress code for employees and ask them to maintain 9 to 5 job timing. Being at home they need not bother about their dress code and the timings, but usually, people do not maintain a proper discipline to work, sometimes they are very late to send a response to their emails just because they start accomplishing their personal work in mid of office time without informing their co-workers. Though, they show their status as available but actually they remain busy in taking a nap sometimes or doing their household work hence, they cannot be more productive for their employer being at home. Yet at the response of above working from home, employees would not be able to get the full update of work via email which causes rework sometimes. Moreover, they cannot visit their team member in case of delay to achieve targets and meet deadlines in time. Therefore, work from home option is good in some scenarios like health issues with you or your family members or some very important work where your presence is required and you are not supposed to take leave etc. We should not misuse the facilities and privileges given to us, which can bring problems and put us in soup. We should always beware of the wrong move.
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computers and modems available in the market using which we can set up the same type of environment as office and can have a better privilege to
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work
from home. I do not
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think
that's a
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practice to
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work
for office staying at home. It affects the
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work
in various mean and spoils
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work
culture of an office.

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Many
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companies
follow a dress code for employees and ask them to maintain 9 to 5 job timing. Being at home they need not bother about their dress code and the timings,
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usually
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people
do not maintain a proper discipline to
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they are
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a response to their emails
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they
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accomplishing their personal
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in mid of office time without informing their co-workers. Though, they
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show
their status as available
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actually they remain busy in taking a nap
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sometimes
or doing their household
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hence
, they cannot be more productive for their employer being at home.

Yet
at the response of above working from home, employees would not be able to
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get
the full update of
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work
via email which causes rework
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sometimes
.
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, they cannot visit their team member in case of delay to achieve targets and
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meet
deadlines in time.

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,
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work
from home option is
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good
in
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scenarios like health issues with you or your family members or
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very
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work
where your presence
is required
and you are not supposed to take
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leave
etc. We should not misuse the facilities and privileges
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given
to us, which can bring problems and put us in soup. We should always beware of the
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wrong
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IELTS essay Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their works from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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