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It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem? v.3

It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 3
It is true that life has become miserable and more painful to live in today's competitive world. The trend to lead a normal life has become a nightmare in most part of the Globe. The impacts have various reasons and change in lifestyle. Let's discuss in detail. Firstly the lifestyle has been evolved to different levels, the rapid growth in technology and to collaborate with the latest trend people's workability is challenged. Generally, most of them believe that the lifestyle and the economy have been moved towards high heights. Technology has been revealed the opportunity and to cater the people's needs to upgrade themselves. Moreover, it has been observed that the economy and lifestyle in urban also drastically varied. For example, all individual thinks to prevail all opportunities and to enjoy each situation. These makes competitive in all ways. Even in education, the trend is been varied and maintained. In addition to that, there is infinite opportunity being evolved, in most of the developing countries there are lots of opportunity in Research and infrastructure sectors. Pupil believes that the more they work they more the will be paid, so they are ready to compromise the health and food for future life. In most of the Asian countries, people not only concentrated in earning more money for their day-to-day life, perhaps they earn to buy properties, which obvious being stressful. As a preventive measure, people can plan their work in a systematic way and spend more time with family. Every individual needs to take care of own selves. In most of the western countries, people do work 5 days in a week and left over will not be entertained for official work. They strictly prohibit and spend their time with family, friends & outings etc. These need to be alerted to people living more stressful life. the government can take some initiative and awareness program to familiarise the trends of leading a normal life, perhaps a protocol can be set by introducing the program's which can show the on and off's of living a stressful life, this could make some awareness between people and will start taking some initiative steps. In conclusion, the protocol to lead a normal life or stressful is completely dependent on each individual, every needs to think whatever is there it is more than enough, need to run behind continuously for some things which will impact on life. It is an opportunity for each individual to change their mindset and the self-satisfactory level, which could make them in moving to the right path to lead a normal and meaningful life, which will not trouble own self or environment.
It is true that
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life
has become miserable and more painful to
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live
in
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today
's competitive world. The
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trend
to lead a
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normal
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life
has become a nightmare in most part of the Globe. The impacts have various reasons and
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change
in
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lifestyle
.
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Let
's discuss in detail.

Firstly
the
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lifestyle
has
been evolved
to
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different
levels, the rapid growth in technology and to collaborate with the latest
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trend
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's workability
is challenged
.
Generally
, most of them believe that the
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lifestyle
and the economy have been
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moved
towards high heights. Technology has
been revealed
the
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opportunity
and to cater the
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people
's
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needs
to upgrade themselves.
Moreover
, it has
been observed
that the economy and
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lifestyle
in urban
also
drastically
varied.
For example
, all
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individual
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thinks
to prevail all
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opportunities
and to enjoy each situation. These
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makes
competitive in
Did you mean "always"?
all ways
. Even in education, the
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trend
is been
varied and maintained.

In addition
to that, there is infinite
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opportunity
being evolved
, in most of the
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developing countries
there are lots of
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opportunity
in Research and infrastructure sectors. Pupil believes that the more they
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work
they more
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the
will
be paid
,
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so
they are ready to compromise the health and food for future
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life
. In most of the Asian countries,
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people
not
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only
concentrated in earning more money for their day-to-day
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life
, perhaps they earn to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
properties, which obvious being stressful.

As a preventive measure,
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people
can plan their
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work
Consider replacing "in a systematic way" with the adverb for "systematic"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a systematic way
and spend more time with family. Every
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individual
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needs
to take care of
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own
selves. In most of the western countries,
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people
do
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work
5 days in a week and
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left
over will not
be entertained
for official
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work
. They
strictly
prohibit and spend their time with family, friends & outings etc. These
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need
to
be alerted
to
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people
living more stressful
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life
.
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the
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government
can take
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some
initiative and awareness program to
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familiarise
the
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trends
of leading a
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normal
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life
, perhaps a protocol can
be set
by introducing the program's which can
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show
the on and
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off's
of living a stressful
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life
, this could
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make
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some
awareness between
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people
and will
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start
taking
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some
initiative steps.

In conclusion
, the protocol to lead a
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normal
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life
or stressful is completely dependent on each
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individual
, every
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needs
to
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think
whatever is there it is more than
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enough
,
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need
to run behind
continuously
for
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some
things which will impact on
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life
. It is an
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opportunity
for each
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individual
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their mindset and the self-satisfactory level, which could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them in moving to the right path to lead a
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normal
and meaningful
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life
, which will not trouble
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
self or environment.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
441 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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