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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.19

Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. v. 19
It is considered by some people that getting a university degree is a quintessential method to a satisfactory profession, however, others encourage youngsters to gain ample experience. I believe that university education is vital for the fields where knowledge is the cornerstone while soft skills are more useful in experiential jobs. On the one hand, studying at the university means gaining a lot of knowledge as well as qualifications. This is because prudent and well-qualified students become a professional in their sphere as many jobs require higher education. Also, more and more universities are offering executive education without a time-intensive or expensive degree program and contracts with high salary allotting companies. As a result, finding a good job is a no longer difficult issue for them. On the other hand, by means of the experience, people can find a well-paid job while they are still students. The reason behind this is that Human Resources managers look for candidates who understand the work environment and holders of sufficient experience. In addition, experienced individuals create their own business and reach the apex of the career ladder. Consequently, they become estimable executives while their peers spend their time with passing complex university examinations. Steve Jobs, who was a proprietor of Apple company, can be a prime example of this phenomenon. Finally, in my opinion, whether people should study at universities or gain soft skills is relatively dependent on their dream job. Take for example, science teaching or medicine, it is not feasible to work in these fields without enough knowledge. By contrast, in business, it is more fundamental for candidates having experience as this requires them to be able to take risks and make decisions immediately. In conclusion, future jobs ought to be at the centre of attention while deciding to enter the university or not. People should ensure that they obtain either experience, or knowledge which guarantees a bright job prospect and a rapid career progression. Votes
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is considered
by
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some
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people
that getting a
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university
degree is a quintessential method to a satisfactory profession,
however
, others encourage youngsters to gain ample
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experience
. I believe that
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university
education is vital for the fields where
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knowledge
is the cornerstone while soft
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skills
are more useful in experiential jobs.

On the one hand, studying at the
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university
means gaining
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a lot of
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knowledge
as well
as qualifications. This is
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because
prudent and well-qualified students become a professional in their sphere as
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many
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jobs
require higher education.
Also
, more and more
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universities
are offering executive education without a time-intensive or expensive degree program and contracts with high salary allotting
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companies
.
As a result
, finding a
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good
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job
is a no longer difficult issue for them.

On the other hand
, by means of the
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experience
,
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people
can find a well-paid
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job
while they are
still
students. The reason behind this is that Human Resources managers look for candidates who understand the work environment and holders of sufficient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
.
In addition
, experienced individuals create their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
business and reach the apex of the career ladder.
Consequently
, they become estimable executives while their peers spend their time with passing complex
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university
examinations. Steve
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Jobs
, who was a proprietor of Apple
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company
, can be a prime example of this phenomenon.

Finally
, in my opinion, whether
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people
should study at
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universities
or gain soft
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skills
is
relatively
dependent on their dream
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job
. Take
for example
, science teaching or medicine, it is not feasible to work in these fields without
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enough
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knowledge
. By contrast, in business, it is more fundamental for candidates having
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experience
as this requires them to be able to take
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risks
and
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make
decisions immediately.

In conclusion
, future
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jobs
ought to be at the
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centre
of attention while deciding to enter the
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university
or not.
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People
should ensure that they obtain either
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experience
, or
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knowledge
which guarantees a bright
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job
prospect and a rapid career progression.

Votes
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. v. 19

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
324 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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